Good neighbour

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Hello,It is a part of my paragraph. The problem is I use past and present in my sentences. Second, I feel safer when my neighbours are nice people. For example, when Khomeini came to Iran, he ordered that it has been the deuty of every Muslim to keep an eye on his neighbour and if he knows who is apostate, a good Muslim will inform the Islamic forces. A good neighbour won't turn you into Islamic forces in the name of God.Thank you for your response.

Sarruby · Accepted Answer

I'm guessing that you're asking for someone to proofread/edit your exerpt, but if that's not the case, please tell me.

Here are the changes I'm going to make no matter what because of the way I was taught English and the way I speak it. I changed "I" and "you" to third person perspectives and "won't" to "will not" because my teacher insists on it, but you can change it back if you want. The "however" sounds like it goes there to me because your second-to-last sentence contrasted with the last one. The "has been" should be "was" if Khomeini made a change in the duty of every Muslim by ordering that every neighbor keep an eye on his neighbor. If it's "has been", then it was the duty of every Muslim to keep an eye on his neighbor before Khomeini ordered it was. I left your British spelling of "neighbor" alone, but I'm American, so I spell it differently.

Second, one feels safer when his neighbours are nice people. For example, when Khomeini came to Iran, he ordered that it has been the ~~deuty~~ duty of every Muslim to keep an eye on his neighbour; and, if a good Muslim knows who is an apostate, he will inform the Islamic forces. However, a good neighbour will not turn his neighbours into Islamic forces in the name of ***.

This is your paragraph in past tense. (I highlighted every verb with a tense other than infinitive, but only yellow changed.)

Second, one felt safer when his neighbours were nice people. For example, when Khomeini came to Iran, he ordered that it had been the duty of every Muslim to keep an eye on his neighbour; and, if a good Muslim knew who was an apostate, he would inform the Islamic forces. However, a good neighbour would not turn his neighbours into Islamic forces in the name of ***.

This is your paragraph in present tense.

Second, one feels safer when his neighbours are nice people. For example, when Khomeini comes to Iran, he orders that it has been the duty of every Muslim to keep an eye on his neighbour; and, if a good Muslim knows who is an apostate, he will inform the Islamic forces. However, a good neighbour will not turn his neighbours into Islamic forces in the name of ***.

This is your paragraph in what I'd call logical tenses. (If you're giving an example from the past - like Khomeini's orders -, but your paper is written in the present, you mix your tenses. I haven't had a teacher complain about it yet. I color-coded the tenses.)

Second, one feels safer when his neighbours are nice people. For example, when Khomeini came to Iran, he ordered that it had been the duty of every Muslim to keep an eye on his neighbour; and, if a good Muslim knew who was an apostate, he would inform the Islamic forces. However, a good neighbour will not turn his neighbours into Islamic forces in the name of ***.

I didn't really understand what you were asking, but I hope this helps a bit!

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