Girl living abroad could use help with grad school letter of intent

Hello, thanks for taking the time for looking at my post. I´m an American currently living in Spain and need some help with from my native speakers. Im applying for graduate school and need some feedback and advice. My letter is not yet completed but I would like any suggestions you might have. Thanks again!

To whom it may concern,

I am writing to express my interest in applying for a Master´s Degree in ***and ****Studies at the University of ****** for the fall 2011 semester. The program in particular caught my interest, because of the flexibility of classes offered at the Edwards Campus and emphasis in knowledge and skills that are necessary to compete in the international job sector.

I have obtained my Bachelor´s of Arts in International Studies and Spanish from ********** University in December 2009. I have had a decent academic record with a vigorous course load which I was able to complete before my anticipated graduation date. During my undergraduate career I was the campus coordinator for Hispanics of Today, which was to promote the Hispanic culture and diversity on campus through fundraisers and campus activities.

During my time at *********, I was given the opportunity to study abroad in India and South America where I was a participant in economic and cultural lectures offered by our host organizations.

After completion of my Bachelor´s degree, I am currently living in *******, Spain where I am a North American Language and Cultural Assistant through the Ministry of Education of Spain. I act as a teaching assistant, sharing my knowledge of the English language and North American culture in a public high school. I am sure that knowledge of Spanish and English will be advantages in obtaining a Master´s Degree in ******and ******* Studies as well as working in public service.

My career aim is to obtain employment with the Department of State in the United States government relating to consular affairs and Foreign Service. When I moved abroad, I found contentment in meeting with the consular office who informed me about all my rights as a citizen of the United States living abroad by offering support and consular assistance. I would like to acquire a strong background in strategic and analytical thinking as well knowledge and managerial skills to which would better prepare me for public service for U.S. citizens and interests abroad.

In conclusion, I would like to say that I am eager to gain new experiences and knowledge and feel that this program is the best way to achieve my goal. I am positive that a Master´s Degree in ****** and ********* Studies from the University ******** will give me a proper foundation and will of a diverse learning environment for my professional career.



Thank you for considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.