Future Plan after Study - Please Review

Hello, I am applying for The Korean Government Scholarship for Graduate (KGSP) and this is my Future Plan
after Study. I hope someone would take the time to help me fix a few grammatical errors, and if there's a need to edit the content and structure, or something I could add to strengthen my case.

Future Plan after Study

o Future plan in Korea or another country after study in Korea

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After I graduate, I would spend the next 2 to 3 years of my career in South Korea in order to gain industrial experience in line with data science. My goal is to learn as much information as possible about the work culture in South Korea and to apply what I have learned from the product development strategy and technology planning courses that I am planning to take. Before going back to my home country, I want to immerse myself holistically so that someday I have something valuable to share to my fellow countrymen, not only about the universities but as well as the corporate culture and everything in between.

Upon returning to my home country, I plan to find a local data science job opening so I can continue practicing data science. I am thinking of chasing my professional objectives and gaining experience for another 3 to 4 years upon my return. After which, I will either opt to continue a PhD education to find a more specific niche in data science or continue growing in the industry. While working on my career goals, I will set aside time to go to local universities and promote data science. I would like to re-echo the importance of data science education, and other things I have learned in South Korea. With the increasing global demand for business intelligence and big data talents, I am willing to promote the importance of business intelligence and big data in today’s modern day education especially in my home country, Philippines.