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Arisha Posted 16 years ago
Letter Writing
Friends, can you help me with motivation letter?
Hello guys!! I need an opinion on my motivation letter and some help please 
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I should say it's first motivation letter in my life.. so I hope you guys will help meeeee. please!!!
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am hereby applying for entrance to Bachelor level Program to Classical Music Performance at the for the September, 2011 fall term. Now I am in my final year of studies at Lyceum ?1 (high school), , in my native , where I receive Secondary Education in May 2011.
But first of all I would like to present some background about myself. My name is Arina XXX, I am living in . I was born in a musical family. Maybe because of that since my childhood I dreamt about being pianist. Almost every day I saw my mother playing on piano, father playing trumpet and learning new parts. It was so amazing in my eyes, and I said to myself, “Yes, I’ll be a musician!!” So, since that time I also tried to play piano, and soon my parents lead me to the in our city.
During my studies I was taking part in the different concerts, competitions and charitable evenings. For example, I took part in significant departure our music school in the State Academy of Music, in charitable concert for blind and dumb people. Also I got many diplomas and thankful letters from city administration. My teachers and director know me as a courteous and resourceful student.
Earlier, my family and I often moved from one place of living to another. That’s why I have changed three schools. But I’ve never been confused by this. On the contrary, it gives many pluses. It’s new friends, new contacts, links and acquaintances, new atmosphere. It completed in me such good qualities like kindness, humanity, responsiveness, curiosity, honesty, diligence. And, I hope, in Academy I without problem could find new friends, make contact with teachers and demonstrate these qualities in person.
I always wanted to go and study abroad. I have a good command of the English language, and I promise I will not have difficulty in studying any subjects taught in Norwegian. I always interested in different languages, especially, in Scandinavian, and for this moment I have big interest to Norwegian. However, I still strive to improve my vocabulary, writing and communicating skills and I know that studying in a foreign country would help greatly in this pursuit. I will also be able to learn about a new culture and meet people with different perspectives. I think this would give me the opportunity to re-discover and upgrade myself as a person and as a student of music.
The foremost reason I always wanted to study abroad is to explore the technology and the quality of education which countries in west possess. is not only famous for its fjords, but also for their exceptional education system. I always thought higher education in would enhance my knowledge and hone my co-curricular and extra-curricular skills. I always had a keen interest in music since my childhood and I believe would be the best place to achieve my career objectives.
The excellence of Yours studying program are time abroad, establishing relationships with others from around the world. And the practical experience I would gain would tremendously enrich me and help me in my quest to achieve excellence. I know that in Your Academy are studying young people not only from , but from many other countries. So I hope that I could meritorious represent Belarus in the of in . I know that Norway is very beautiful country, with incomparable nature, exceptional fjords and brilliant folk culture, and I will be very glad to show Norwegian culture in Belarus and Belarusian culture in .
In conclusion I would like to say that of in has very good reputation and high standard of education in . It’s proud to be and to study there. So I am positive that I could find my own way to start my music career there.
Thank You for your time and consideration.
I am looking forward to meet you soon.
Sincerely Yours,
)I should say it's first motivation letter in my life.. so I hope you guys will help meeeee. please!!!
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am hereby applying for entrance to Bachelor level Program to Classical Music Performance at the for the September, 2011 fall term. Now I am in my final year of studies at Lyceum ?1 (high school), , in my native , where I receive Secondary Education in May 2011.
But first of all I would like to present some background about myself. My name is Arina XXX, I am living in . I was born in a musical family. Maybe because of that since my childhood I dreamt about being pianist. Almost every day I saw my mother playing on piano, father playing trumpet and learning new parts. It was so amazing in my eyes, and I said to myself, “Yes, I’ll be a musician!!” So, since that time I also tried to play piano, and soon my parents lead me to the in our city.
During my studies I was taking part in the different concerts, competitions and charitable evenings. For example, I took part in significant departure our music school in the State Academy of Music, in charitable concert for blind and dumb people. Also I got many diplomas and thankful letters from city administration. My teachers and director know me as a courteous and resourceful student.
Earlier, my family and I often moved from one place of living to another. That’s why I have changed three schools. But I’ve never been confused by this. On the contrary, it gives many pluses. It’s new friends, new contacts, links and acquaintances, new atmosphere. It completed in me such good qualities like kindness, humanity, responsiveness, curiosity, honesty, diligence. And, I hope, in Academy I without problem could find new friends, make contact with teachers and demonstrate these qualities in person.
I always wanted to go and study abroad. I have a good command of the English language, and I promise I will not have difficulty in studying any subjects taught in Norwegian. I always interested in different languages, especially, in Scandinavian, and for this moment I have big interest to Norwegian. However, I still strive to improve my vocabulary, writing and communicating skills and I know that studying in a foreign country would help greatly in this pursuit. I will also be able to learn about a new culture and meet people with different perspectives. I think this would give me the opportunity to re-discover and upgrade myself as a person and as a student of music.
The foremost reason I always wanted to study abroad is to explore the technology and the quality of education which countries in west possess. is not only famous for its fjords, but also for their exceptional education system. I always thought higher education in would enhance my knowledge and hone my co-curricular and extra-curricular skills. I always had a keen interest in music since my childhood and I believe would be the best place to achieve my career objectives.
The excellence of Yours studying program are time abroad, establishing relationships with others from around the world. And the practical experience I would gain would tremendously enrich me and help me in my quest to achieve excellence. I know that in Your Academy are studying young people not only from , but from many other countries. So I hope that I could meritorious represent Belarus in the of in . I know that Norway is very beautiful country, with incomparable nature, exceptional fjords and brilliant folk culture, and I will be very glad to show Norwegian culture in Belarus and Belarusian culture in .
In conclusion I would like to say that of in has very good reputation and high standard of education in . It’s proud to be and to study there. So I am positive that I could find my own way to start my music career there.
Thank You for your time and consideration.
I am looking forward to meet you soon.
Sincerely Yours,
Top answer
Hi Arisha, welcome to the Forums! I've made some suggestions on your motivation letter below. You could make it better by not repeating yourself so much.
- Hi Arisha, welcome to the Forums!
- I've made some suggestions on your motivation letter below.
- You could make it better by not repeating yourself so much.
- For example you mention your home city several times.
- Instead of general ideas, you could give more personal information such as the instruments you play, and perhaps some favorite music, or difficult pieces that you have mastered.
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Hi Arisha, welcome to the Forums!
I've made some suggestions on your motivation letter below. You could make it better by not repeating yourself so much. For example you mention your home city several times. Instead of general ideas, you could give more personal information such as the instruments you play, and perhaps some favorite music, or difficult pieces that you have mastered.
I've made some suggestions on your motivation letter below. You could make it better by not repeating yourself so much. For example you mention your home city several times. Instead of general ideas, you could give more personal information such as the instruments you play, and perhaps some favorite music, or difficult pieces that you have mastered.
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AlpheccaStars, thank sooooo much!!!
You can't imagine how you helped me!! really!!!!
thank you many many times))))
You can't imagine how you helped me!! really!!!!
thank you many many times
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Hi Arisha:
If you rewrite your letter and post it in a reply to this thread, I will look at it again.
All the best,
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If you rewrite your letter and post it in a reply to this thread, I will look at it again.
All the best,
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