Flying through the clear blue sky I get a feeling that gives me joy inside Seeing the seasons change as the years go by I see how nothing stays the same Friends may come and go but family will stay forever Having no restrictions or problems of any kind I see life from a different side Fighting and worrying were once my way But now I see it another way Flapping
It's a good start. It's not necessarily a matter of adding more (as a matter of fact, revision is generally an elimination of unnecessary words, especially with poetry), but it needs to focus more. The connection between flying and the thoughts is not clear: why is the person flying? Why is it not what the person really wants perhaps? These points need to be made clear.