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Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
Business & Finance
Formal business letter
Hi everyone!
I would like to ask you to give me any advice about writing a business letter. What you think about this mail when you read it. Currently, I am writing an official university letter for visit request. I am trying so hard but what do you think about the letter below. Is this bad or good, too direct or unclear, impolite or polite. I need your suggestion and any advice!!
T.
I wish to take this opportunity to express my sincere gratitude for your support for the academic and student exchanges between our universities.
I am writing to you that I would like to request you to grant permission to our three administrative stuffs for visit to AAA University from September 9th to 15th. The alternative date is from August 21st to 27th or from September 24th to 30th.
The purpose of visiting is to give an opportunity to our young administrative stuffs to learn more about international institution in overseas. In addition, we believe that this will contribute to further international exchange and deepen friendship between both universities.
During the visit, our delegates would like to discuss and share university administrative knowledge, especially in the field of admission systems, curriculum coordination, student service, management and disaster planning for future practice in which helps to improve knowledge levels and skills.
Our stuffs would like to visit your premises as per your convenience. For your expediency I will send list of questions that we will discuss during our visit.
Hoping for an early reply.
Sincerely yours
I would like to ask you to give me any advice about writing a business letter. What you think about this mail when you read it. Currently, I am writing an official university letter for visit request. I am trying so hard but what do you think about the letter below. Is this bad or good, too direct or unclear, impolite or polite. I need your suggestion and any advice!!
T.
I wish to take this opportunity to express my sincere gratitude for your support for the academic and student exchanges between our universities.
I am writing to you that I would like to request you to grant permission to our three administrative stuffs for visit to AAA University from September 9th to 15th. The alternative date is from August 21st to 27th or from September 24th to 30th.
The purpose of visiting is to give an opportunity to our young administrative stuffs to learn more about international institution in overseas. In addition, we believe that this will contribute to further international exchange and deepen friendship between both universities.
During the visit, our delegates would like to discuss and share university administrative knowledge, especially in the field of admission systems, curriculum coordination, student service, management and disaster planning for future practice in which helps to improve knowledge levels and skills.
Our stuffs would like to visit your premises as per your convenience. For your expediency I will send list of questions that we will discuss during our visit.
Hoping for an early reply.
Sincerely yours
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I would like to express my sincere gratitude for your support for the academic and student exchanges between our universities. I am writing to request permission for three of our administrative University for one of these periods this year: August 21st–27th, September 9th–15th, or September 24th–30th. The purpose of the visit is to give our young administrators the opportunity to learn more about the operation of overseas institutions .
- I would like to express my sincere gratitude for your support for the academic and student exchanges between our universities.
- I am writing to request permission for three of our administrative University for one of these periods this year: August 21st–27th, September 9th–15th, or September 24th–30th.
- The purpose of the visit is to give our young administrators the opportunity to learn more about the operation of overseas institutions .
- We also hope that this will encourage further international exchange and deepen the friendship between our universities.
- During the visit, our representatives would like to discuss and share university administrative experiences and procedures, especially in the areas of admission systems, curriculum coordination, student service, management , and disaster planning , with the goal of broadening expertise at both ends of the exchange.
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I would like to express my sincere gratitude for your support for the academic and student exchanges between our universities.
I am writing to request permission for three of our administrative University for one of these periods this year: August 21st–27th, September 9th–15th, or September 24th–30th.
The purpose of the visit is to give our young
I am writing to request permission for three of our administrative University for one of these periods this year: August 21st–27th, September 9th–15th, or September 24th–30th.
The purpose of the visit is to give our young
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Thank you for your time and proof reading.
I found very interesting grammar mistakes that I have.
Such as, field --> area, delegates --> representatives or staff members, grant permission --> request permission and so on.
I feel like these words are similar to the other. But in sentence, the word gives different meaning or nuance??
I think I need to wor
I found very interesting grammar mistakes that I have.
Such as, field --> area, delegates --> representatives or staff members, grant permission --> request permission and so on.
I feel like these words are similar to the other. But in sentence, the word gives different meaning or nuance??
I think I need to wor
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AnonymousI feel like these words are similar to the other. But in sentence, the word gives different meaning or nuance??The words are similar, but they each have their proper place in different topics and contexts. These are not usually indicated in dictionaries, so you will have to learn by experience. A lot of reading will help you.
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