Forests are the lungs of the earth. Destruction of the world's forests amounts to death of the world we currently know. What's your opinion?

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There is a fact that our planet is protected and supported by the tree all over the world. With the recent uncontrolled forest exploiting, some people think that this possibly leads to the end of the earth. In my point of view in this essay, if people keep destroying this green natural resource, they will soon face many serious consequences such as global warming, disaster, or even extinction.

Firstly, it's knowledgeable that people now have to suffer the climate change resulted by greenhouse effect caused by carbon dioxide. Generally, carbon dioxide is absorbed by trees, which prevents the greenhouse effect. However, these filter machines are reducing continually, leaving many troubles in which there is global warming. This will partly modify the climate like warmer temperature, wind direction change or higher sea level. Besides, a lot of carbon dioxide may pollute environment seriously, harming the global health.

Furthermore, destruction of the world's forest will make advantage for disaster as flood, drought, tidal waves and so forth. People all know that trees protect them from flood by keeping a large amount of water, or drought by maintaining the humidity of the world. However, it seems like our efficient shield is broken by ourselves. According to many scientists, in this century, people have to suffer a lot of disaster, proved by the Tsunami in Thailand, or by the earthquakes in Haiti and Japan. Eventually, the unavoidable results are poverty, starvation, losing home and death, which affects seriously the human lives.

Equally important, not only is the human affected but the animals are also related firmly to the trees in global ecology system. If the forests disappear, there are enormous amount of animals have to witness the condition of no habitation and the deficiency of food, inevitable. Moreover, some species which are in risk of extinction could never exist on this earth again. In some recent research, the ecologists find that at present, the proportion of extinction for each species is higher than ever. This is a warning bell for the governments to make proper policy to protect animals from human activities.

To summarize, although it's undeniable that using natural resources helps develop the world, compared with what people have lost so far from over destruction the forests, it's not worth. People need to control their nature exploiting to improve the earth as well as their lives.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

Hello anhtu214;
I know that you are a very serious writer, because the topic is a concern of many scientists. But you do not use some of the English words correctly, so the reader will have some very strange reactions given the somberness of the topic. You need to write more carefully.
I have made a few comments on the largest problems.

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There is a fact that our planet is protected and supported by the tree (When you say "the tree," it means one particular tree that everybody knows about. Here, my reaction is "Where is this wonderful tree that holds up and protects the whole planet?) all over the world (planet means the world. It is very strange to say "the planet ... all over the world").
With the recent uncontrolled forest exploiting, some people think that this possibly leads to the end of the earth (The end of the earth will come when the sun becomes a red giant star and swallows it up. Changing the flora and fauna on the earth will not end the earth itself; after all, the earth existed before any life developed at all. ). In my point of view in this essay, if people keep destroying this green natural resource, they will soon face many serious consequences such as global warming, disaster, or even extinction.

Firstly, it's knowledgeable (knowledgeable describes a person who know a lot about a subject. It is not correct here.) that people now have to suffer the effects of climate change resulting from a rise in global temperatures ~~resulted by~~ greenhouse effect caused by carbon dioxide. Generally, carbon dioxide is absorbed by trees, which prevents the greenhouse effect (no, the greenhouse effect is just a principle that atmospheres composed of certain gasses retain heat rather than radiate it. Saying that the greenhouse effect can be prevented is like saying that you can prevent water from boiling if it is heated on a stove.) . However, these filter machines (?) are reducing (You need to use the passive voice) continually, leaving many troubles in which there is global warming. This will ~~partly~~ modify the climate by raising temperatures, ~~like warmer temperature, wind direction change or higher sea level.~~ (the sea level is not climate.) Besides, a lot of carbon dioxide may pollute the environment seriously, harming ~~the~~ global health. (This naturally-occurring gas is necessary for all plants. Perhaps you mean carbon monoxide, which is very poisonous. ) Furthermore, destruction of the world's forests will make advantage(?) for disaster as flood, drought, tidal waves and so forth. People all know that trees protect them from flood by keeping a large amount of water, or drought by maintaining the humidity of the world. (The reasons are not correct. Tree roots keep the soil from eroding, and the soil retains water. The oceans, lakes and rain water maintain humidity levels.) However, it seems like our efficient shield is broken by ourselves.

According to many scientists, in this century, people have to suffered from many ~~a lot of~~ disasters, ~~proved by~~ such as the tsunami in Thailand, or by the earthquakes in Haiti and Japan. (But earthquakes and their tsunamis have no relation to global warming. They are not related at all to the earth's atmosphere or the vegetation on earth.) Eventually, the unavoidable results are poverty, starvation, losing home and death, which affects seriously ~~the~~ human lives.

Equally important, not only is the human affected but the animals are also related firmly to the trees ("related" means that they have the same family) in global ecology system. If the forests disappear, there are enormous amount of animals have to witness the condition of no habitation and the deficiency of food, inevitable. Moreover, some species which are in risk of extinction could never exist on this earth again. In some recent research, the ecologists find that at present, the proportion of extinction for each species (either a species is extinct or it is not - you cannot have a proportion of extinction for one species) is higher than ever. This is a warning bell for the governments to make proper policy to protect animals from human activities.

To summarize, although it's undeniable that using natural resources helps develop the world, compared with what people have lost so far from over destruction the forests, it's not worth. People need to control their nature exploiting to improve the earth as well as their lives.

Anhtu214 · Answer

I really appreciate what you've done for me. Actually, I'm training myself to write better day by day, so I hope I will have more valuable comments from you to improve my skill.

Thank you very much.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Thanks for your feedback. It is difficult to give comments on essays when it is obvious that the writer has tried so diligently, and there are quite a few problems. It is not in any way intended to be a personal criticism.

But if you read your sources, write carefully, and practice, I think you can become a great writer. Be patient, and keep trying!

All the best,
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Anhtu214 · Answer

I've redone the essay. Please check it again for me if you have time. Thank you

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For many years, forest has been known as one of the most important parts on the earth contributing to the biosphere stability. With deforestation increasing in rate recently, some people claim that our world is being threatened seriously. In my point of view, if people keep destroying this green resource, they will soon face mass of serious consequences such as greenhouse effect, soil erosion, or even extinction.

Firstly, it's well-known that deforestation is cited as one of the culprits of the greenhouse effect. When trees are cutter or burnt, a large amount of carbon dioxide will be released in burning or decay process, which raises the world greenhouse gas emissions. Moreover, forests help remove carbon from the atmosphere and release oxygen back into atmosphere during respiration. Because of that, if they are destroyed, the environment will get polluted, ultimately. Besides, the world's temperature will get higher during deforestation, which is called as global warming, followed by ice caps melting down, releasing metal and so forth.

Equally important, deforestation would increase rates of soil erosion. Because of that, the flooding in the lower place will happen. In an other aspect, roots of trees could bind soil. Therefore, the soil is kept in place and may prevent landslides. However, if forests are destroyed, the risk of landslides will increase, which may threaten people living nearby. In Vietnam, with a significant number of forest areas damaged, we have to witness many consequences resulting from flood, especially in Middle Location.

Another drawback is destruction of forests may lead extinction of some species. Without forest, there's no longer habitat for wildlife and the biodiversity will be affected negatively. To be worse, some animals and plants could also disappear and the genetic variations may be destroyed irretrievably. Consequently, people may not have enough natural resources to develop, resulting in poor living standards. For example, in medicinal conservation, some diseases may not be cure because of lacking some kind of trees and the rate of mortality will increase regrettably.

To summarize, although it's undeniable that exploiting natural resources helps develop the world, people need to look back to see whether what they've lost is worth. They have to control their actions to improve the earth as well as their live

AlpheccaStars · Answer

I have made some comments on your first two paragraphs.
Please study science so that you can write about it correctly.

The greenhouse effect is a physical principle. All it says is that certain gasses in the atmosphere act just like a blanket that keeps you warm in the winter. These gasses do not allow the earth to radiate excess heat into space. Thus, if the concentration of these gasses increase, the temperature of the atmosphere and the earth's surface will rise because more heat is retained. As a result, the earth will get warmer. Humans as well as natural processes can affect the global climate because of the greenhouse effect. For example, if we lowered the concentration of greenhouse gasses in the atmosphere, the earth would get cooler, and if we increased them, the earth would get warmer.
Pollution is mostly associated with the release of poisonous compounds such as sulpher oxides, nitrous oxides, heavy metals, radioactive elements, and carbon monoxide. These are the products of an industrial society - transportation, power generation, and manufacturing.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Greenhouse_gas

For many years, scientists have ~~forest has been~~ known that the earth's forests are as one of the most important contributors ~~parts on the earth contributing~~ to the biosphere's stability. With the rate of deforestation increasing ~~in rate~~ recently, some people claim that our world is seriously being threatened ~~seriously~~. In my point of view, if people keep destroying this green resource, they will soon face many ~~mass of~~ serious consequences such as soil erosion, ~~such as greenhouse effect,~~ climate change due to the greenhouse effect, or even extinction of many species due to the loss of their habitat and food sources. Firstly, it's well-known that deforestation is cited as one of the sources of the increase of concentration of carbon dioxide in the earth's atmosphere. ~~culprits~~ of ~~the greenhouse effect~~. When trees are cutter or burnt, a large amount of carbon dioxide will be released in burning or decay process~~, which~~ raises the world greenhouse gas emissions. Moreover, forests ~~help~~ remove carbon from ~~the atmosphere~~ and release oxygen back into atmosphere during respiration. Because of that, if they are destroyed, the environment will get polluted (?), ultimately. Besides, the world's temperature will get higher during deforestation, which is called as global warming, followed by ice caps melting down, releasing metal (?) and so forth.

Anhtu214 · Answer

I did. However, some of them I couldn't understand or get the main idea. The second is it's quite difficult for me to connect the clues together in the essay. How should I do now?

What will happen if I face a new topic like this in my IELTS test?

I'm really confused now. I couldn't be good at every subject, certainly. How could I handle that?

I really need some help.

Anyway, thank you, for being patient with my bad.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

anhtu214I did. However, some of them I couldn't understand or get the main idea. The second is it's quite difficult for me to connect the clues together in the essay. What should I do now?

I think that you need to study science in your own language. If you try to study science in English, you have the difficulty of understanding the English words and then the difficulty of the science itself. That will be more than twice as difficult.

Next, you need to study English vocabulary separately so that you can use the words correctly. You can post sentences and questions here. We will be happy to help you.

Anonymous · Answer

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