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Mosja Posted 6 years ago
Grammar

Firing a copyright dispute: Is my writing alright?

This video focuses on BBC One "technical fault" screen which appears during the programme and it has nothing to do with the copyright since the video didn't feature a full-length film. The title clearly says "BBC One breakdown" which doesn't associated with the film broadcasted on that day.


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This video focuses on BBC One "technical fault" screen which appears during the programme and it has nothing associated with the film since the video didn't feature a full-length film. The title clearly says "BBC One breakdown" which doesn't associated with the film broadcasted on that day.



Could you write your own sentences, please? So I can compare with my writing, thank you.


Which word would be best to replace "focus"

  

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There are many issues with the comprehensibility of your paragraph. You write about a film, a video, a screen shot, and a programme, and it is impossible to figure out what you mean because these are all synonyms. This video focuses on BBC One 's "technical fault" screen which appears during the programme .

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  • There are many issues with the comprehensibility of your paragraph.
  • You write about a film, a video, a screen shot, and a programme, and it is impossible to figure out what you mean because these are all synonyms.
  • This video focuses on BBC One 's "technical fault" screen which appears during the programme .
  • ) has nothing associated with the film (I do not understand this) since the video was not didn't feature a full-length film.
  • The title of the video is clearly says "BBC One B reakdown" and it did not reference the which doesn't associated with the film that was broadcasted later on on that day.
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There are many issues with the comprehensibility of your paragraph. You write about a film, a video, a screen shot, and a programme, and it is impossible to figure out what you mean because these are all synonyms.

This video focuses on BBC One's "technical fault" screen which appears during the programme. (What programme?)

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Sorry, I don't understand either of your versions.

Can you explain more simply what you are trying to say, please?

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