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00I have several reasons for seeking admittance into your PhD program at this point in my life.00 00I experienced almost five years in the work force with growing frustrations, consequently due to lack of job satisfaction and lack of independence.00 Despite these feelings, I have come to 00know the triumph of continuously learning myself, not becoming complacent, and holding on to the desire to help others. 00 02br
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00I believe I possess particular strengths that will contribute to my success in your graduate program at Fielding.00 00Because of my varied work experience, I am able to offer strength and diversity to your program. I view the past five years as invaluable, as they have shaped my motives, compelled me to appreciate the need for goal orientation, and allowed me to experience the triumphs and frustrations of the "real" world. 00 00I have continued to hold on to my strong sense of purpose. Also, being a disciplined person, I have developed very useful time management skills to handle a busy course load. This dedication and self control will greatly benefit me during my graduate work at 00 since it encompasses the distance learning approach.00 00At this point in my life, I have the support of my husband and I am able to pursue my graduate education on a full-time basis.00 00I want to fully emerge myself in the cirriculum and experience and use extra time to volunteer in clinical settings to further my research experience.00 00I have had time to mature, enroll in a variety of courses to find my niche and time to evaluate why I’ve made past mistakes and how to approach situations differently.00 00I am so appreciative that I waited and gave myself the opportunity to develop.00 00I have since been able to truly experience adulthood and embrace the concept of career choice being something more in depth than choosing a major or salary potential.00 00My approach and desire to study the field of Clinical Psychology is much more well-rounded and realistic to challenges and achievements that I am prepared to face during this journey through graduate school.00 00I love the fact that Fielding centers its mission around the mid-career, adult learner because this will help aid feelings of intimidation when returning higher education after being away a number of years.00 00I also appreciate the numerous resources available for students, especially since it is a distance learning program there is still one-on-one assistance available.00 00 02br
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00I intend to continue my education by pursuing a Ph.D. in clinical psychology. 00 00Here are my scholarly and professional interests and goals.00 00First, I am most interested in working with obesity and eating disorder populations.00 00I would like to research the psychological motivations behind persons eating habits and the role self-esteem and body image plays in connection with those eating habits.00 00Obesity and health related issues are increasingly becoming tied to the field of psychology.00 00Secondly, I have interests in working with patients coping with diseases such as AIDS and cancer.00 00Both of my professional goals and interests are linked to components of your program since Fielding offers the Health Psychology concentration. 00 00The concentration offers courses taught by faculty specialized in the area. 00 00There is also a variety of course offerings that would cultivate the professional skills need in the field. I like the combination of both psychological intervention and assessment methods being the focus of the health psychology concentration.00 00I appreciate the research done by faculty members at Fielding. Among these are Dr. April Fallon and her assessments and research on eating disorders, Dr. Leann Stadtlander and how adult patients and family members cope with cancer, along with numerous professors trained in research design and implementation. Finally, I plan to dedicate my career to raising the awareness of these issues through research, private practice/consultation and eventually teaching at the university level.00 00It is my intention to contribute empirically-based findings to the clinical psychology field through my research. This scholarly goal is linked to components of Fielding’s program by intergrating a clinical training model, research methodology and theoretical perspective approaches. I feel that Fielding’s scholar-practitioner approach fits my goals since I want to be a practicing clinician, teach and conduct scholarly research.00 00I feel that I can bring enthusiasm, maturity and individuality to your program as a result of my diversified experiences and my desire to excel in the clinical psychology field.010id1