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Manojx Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Finding mistakes oh here
Hi to all and senior members can any one give me idea that how could i write a essay or some stories more understandingly than this. here i have written a story which i read from a book can anyone point out my mistakes on here
It was a windy day around 5.30 pm. Ms.Hinno was a taylor. she stroke a knocker on the door of ms. rina to give back her dress that she was ordred to stretch.As ms. leena came to see ms.rina while ms. hinno was striking knocker on the door.she was continoulsy knocking on the door for 10 min but there was no reply. so Ms, hinno said that she forgotten her given appoinment and would have gone to somewhere but ms.leena said that she would never forget her appoinment before and said to take a peek through the window inside of house as she peeked at the inside of a room she was shocked cause Ms.rena was murdered and the body laid upon the sofa in the house. thus she informed to the police as ms.hino guarded the body. then the police investigation had commenced according to the post mottom report given by the police source said that she was murdered between around 4 - 5 pm in the evening , when his husband had gone out. the police inquired her husband where were you went when your wife was dead ? he replied that he had gone out to see his neighbour as he had been requested to meet her around the time of murder happened and said she was not at home when i went there replied by her servant. and also he was not so much grieved because of his wife demises.but he stood normally beside her body as if he did'nt screwed up as much cause of hers murder. and the police questioned over his neighbour. as her name was ms.anna.
she said that she had not call anyone on the occasion of murder but as he said i was not at home and had gone out for the purpose of work but my servant maid was there at home. Police asked her how they were being with each other and how about their relation ship between.In the tragedy place the police found a needle that could be used by a tailor as they scrutinized more closely on the area of the murder. But the police have no idea how the lady was murdered by a tailor if there is no issue between them ? therefore a detective called by the police to find out the motive of murder. he started his inquiry the firstday itself that he had arrived there. anyhow at last he found out both the ladies were in a spot in which worthful diamond had stolen from a jewel shop that was 10 mile away from the place they were living. they were involved in the theft stolen of diamond. therefore detective arrested ms.hinno(tailor) that in the case of theft of diamond. then ms.hinno given a statement that why she was murdered ms.rina after police had arrested. she said that both of them jointly stolen a diamond from a shop but she had been cheated by ms.rina by having all the money with herself that had come from selling the diamond to a smuggler. so i was enraged against ms.rina for the outrage she had done to me. eventually i decided to take a vengeance at her and i was expecting for a oppurtuinity to murder her and she said that she was dipped a needle in the poison water and placed a small volume of poison at the end of a needle. but in the meanwhile we had good relationships one she asked me to come home and i used this oppurtunity to take on my revenge so as she asked i had gone her home before 15 minutes the time she said. but unfortnately her husband was at home so i gave him a note through a errand to meet his neighbour at 3.pm as i knew that his neighbour was not at her home. and her husband was set off to meet his neighbour by leaving her alone at home. then she said that she was crept quietly into the house as she was sleeping lightfully on the sofa then i had pricked a poisonous needle at her body thus she was dead in further 10 minutes later then i came out from the home as i did'nt know anything about this and knocking on the door as i had already been asked to come.
It was a windy day around 5.30 pm. Ms.Hinno was a taylor. she stroke a knocker on the door of ms. rina to give back her dress that she was ordred to stretch.As ms. leena came to see ms.rina while ms. hinno was striking knocker on the door.she was continoulsy knocking on the door for 10 min but there was no reply. so Ms, hinno said that she forgotten her given appoinment and would have gone to somewhere but ms.leena said that she would never forget her appoinment before and said to take a peek through the window inside of house as she peeked at the inside of a room she was shocked cause Ms.rena was murdered and the body laid upon the sofa in the house. thus she informed to the police as ms.hino guarded the body. then the police investigation had commenced according to the post mottom report given by the police source said that she was murdered between around 4 - 5 pm in the evening , when his husband had gone out. the police inquired her husband where were you went when your wife was dead ? he replied that he had gone out to see his neighbour as he had been requested to meet her around the time of murder happened and said she was not at home when i went there replied by her servant. and also he was not so much grieved because of his wife demises.but he stood normally beside her body as if he did'nt screwed up as much cause of hers murder. and the police questioned over his neighbour. as her name was ms.anna.
she said that she had not call anyone on the occasion of murder but as he said i was not at home and had gone out for the purpose of work but my servant maid was there at home. Police asked her how they were being with each other and how about their relation ship between.In the tragedy place the police found a needle that could be used by a tailor as they scrutinized more closely on the area of the murder. But the police have no idea how the lady was murdered by a tailor if there is no issue between them ? therefore a detective called by the police to find out the motive of murder. he started his inquiry the firstday itself that he had arrived there. anyhow at last he found out both the ladies were in a spot in which worthful diamond had stolen from a jewel shop that was 10 mile away from the place they were living. they were involved in the theft stolen of diamond. therefore detective arrested ms.hinno(tailor) that in the case of theft of diamond. then ms.hinno given a statement that why she was murdered ms.rina after police had arrested. she said that both of them jointly stolen a diamond from a shop but she had been cheated by ms.rina by having all the money with herself that had come from selling the diamond to a smuggler. so i was enraged against ms.rina for the outrage she had done to me. eventually i decided to take a vengeance at her and i was expecting for a oppurtuinity to murder her and she said that she was dipped a needle in the poison water and placed a small volume of poison at the end of a needle. but in the meanwhile we had good relationships one she asked me to come home and i used this oppurtunity to take on my revenge so as she asked i had gone her home before 15 minutes the time she said. but unfortnately her husband was at home so i gave him a note through a errand to meet his neighbour at 3.pm as i knew that his neighbour was not at her home. and her husband was set off to meet his neighbour by leaving her alone at home. then she said that she was crept quietly into the house as she was sleeping lightfully on the sofa then i had pricked a poisonous needle at her body thus she was dead in further 10 minutes later then i came out from the home as i did'nt know anything about this and knocking on the door as i had already been asked to come.
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Hello Manojox If you are trying to write essays may I suggest that you try to write them using a text processing program such as "Word", many spelling and grammar faults will be automatically indicated to you. These programs are invaluable and I use them all the time. Use of capital letters: The first words of a sentence The pronoun "I" Proper nouns (the names of specific people, places, organizations, and sometimes things) The names of ***, specific deities, religious figures, and holy books ETC: You can look up other uses of capital letters in a grammar book or on the internet.
- Hello Manojox If you are trying to write essays may I suggest that you try to write them using a text processing program such as "Word", many spelling and grammar faults will be automatically indicated to you.
- These programs are invaluable and I use them all the time.
- Use of capital letters: The first words of a sentence The pronoun "I" Proper nouns (the names of specific people, places, organizations, and sometimes things) The names of ***, specific deities, religious figures, and holy books ETC: You can look up other uses of capital letters in a grammar book or on the internet.
- The use of a spelling and grammar check such as in a text processor would highlight these for you.
- Not all errors would be spotted using this method.
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Hello Manojox
If you are trying to write essays may I suggest that you try to write them using a text processing program such as "Word", many spelling and grammar faults will be automatically indicated to you. These programs are invaluable and I use them all the time.
Use of capital letters: The first words of a sentence
If you are trying to write essays may I suggest that you try to write them using a text processing program such as "Word", many spelling and grammar faults will be automatically indicated to you. These programs are invaluable and I use them all the time.
Use of capital letters: The first words of a sentence
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