Finding mistakes in my essay.

Hi guys, iam writing a story about a lady who returned to her homeland.
the story must contain 10 similies an 5 metaphors.
Please help me in finding the mistakes I made.Here is my drafts:

When Mrs.Worrall returned to England, she found herself besieged by her relatives and friends. They made a welcome party for her. As she smelled the fresh air of her town, her body started to relax. She remembered what this place has done for her. She remembered the lake that she used to sit beside in the childhood. As soon as she steped toward the lake, she saw the water slightly waving at her as though as it was saying hellow.The pines surrounded the water admired themselves as the were reflecting back.

Above all, Mrs.Worrall was a tall lady like a cherries tree. She had soft features and a well shaped nose. Her mouth was flexible and her lips were red like strawberry. Her hair was blonde and wavy like sea waves; the eyebrows were arched and darker than her hair which was nearly red. Her eyes were sparkling and blue just like the river's water. Her dress were stipend like the royal dresses.

when she decided to leave the lake the dark woolen sky was shining and the sun sharpened the rocks on the shore. The water was creased and burning. The wind was roaring and racing with the gesse above the lake. As the darkness was pretruding the sun, everything was quiet. The birds were singing to each other and the bees wre flying from flower to flower. The water was a morter hitting the rocks.Mrs.Worrall left her favourate place with an indescribable happinnies.