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Sun 94 Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
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I was asked to give written feedback about my classmates' writing. If you see any problems, can I have your comments?
Even though you wrote a long essay, I think this is a paper that just lists your past experiences and your future plans/hope. You are writing a personal statement and you don't seem to understand what you have to include in your paper. There is no organization. It is just about your belief. Reread your paper and rewrite.
Even though you wrote a long essay, I think this is a paper that just lists your past experiences and your future plans/hope. You are writing a personal statement and you don't seem to understand what you have to include in your paper. There is no organization. It is just about your belief. Reread your paper and rewrite.
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Hi, It's a bit harsh (" you don't seem to understand ... it is just about ... reread and rewrite "), but maybe it's just a cultural thing.
- Hi, It's a bit harsh (" you don't seem to understand ...
- it is just about ...
- reread and rewrite "), but maybe it's just a cultural thing.
- If I were to receive feedback, I'd expect to read not only what is wrong (in your text, " you wrote a long essay ", " just lists your past experiences and your future plans/hope " ) and why it's wrong, but also what I should have done and I didn't.
- How about softening that " you don't seem to understand what you have to include in your paper " and expanding on it?
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Hi,
It's a bit harsh ("you don't seem to understand ... it is just about ... reread and rewrite"), but maybe it's just a cultural thing.
If I were to receive feedback, I'd expect to read not only what is wrong (in your text, "you wrote a long essay", "just lists your past experiences and your future plans/hope ") and why it's wrong, but also what I should h
It's a bit harsh ("you don't seem to understand ... it is just about ... reread and rewrite"), but maybe it's just a cultural thing.
If I were to receive feedback, I'd expect to read not only what is wrong (in your text, "you wrote a long essay", "just lists your past experiences and your future plans/hope ") and why it's wrong, but also what I should h
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