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Zorina Posted 16 years ago
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Favourite family photo
Here is the discriptions of my favourite family photo. Could you please tell me if there are any grammar mistakes or some roughness in use of words.
These wrapped up from top to toe girls are me and my elder sister Nastya. Behind us everything is covered with snow but I can discern the back of a wooden bench and branches of bird cherries. And our white hats made of fake fur look like snowdrifts on our heads.
We are standing near the entrance into the house we live in. We’ve just got out of our cozy flat. We have a little plastic bag of millet grain and are going to make the round of all bird feeders of our courtyard.
There aren’t our parents in the picture but I can feel the presents of both of them. My sister is facing a camera and conspiratorially looking sideways at mother. And I’m looking at the father with a camera. I sphered my chicks and I’m trying to keep my face serious but in fact I just can’t help smiling.
I like this photo because despite the ringing frost we were joyful and playful. We had a united family and enjoyed ordinary things of life.
These wrapped up from top to toe girls are me and my elder sister Nastya. Behind us everything is covered with snow but I can discern the back of a wooden bench and branches of bird cherries. And our white hats made of fake fur look like snowdrifts on our heads.
We are standing near the entrance into the house we live in. We’ve just got out of our cozy flat. We have a little plastic bag of millet grain and are going to make the round of all bird feeders of our courtyard.
There aren’t our parents in the picture but I can feel the presents of both of them. My sister is facing a camera and conspiratorially looking sideways at mother. And I’m looking at the father with a camera. I sphered my chicks and I’m trying to keep my face serious but in fact I just can’t help smiling.
I like this photo because despite the ringing frost we were joyful and playful. We had a united family and enjoyed ordinary things of life.
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I have underlined some problem areas: These wrapped up from top to toe girls are me and my elder sister Nastya. Behind us everything is covered with snow but I you can discern the back of a wooden bench and branches of bird cherries. And our white hats made of fake fur look like snowdrifts on our heads.
- I have underlined some problem areas: These wrapped up from top to toe girls are me and my elder sister Nastya.
- Behind us everything is covered with snow but I you can discern the back of a wooden bench and branches of bird cherries.
- And our white hats made of fake fur look like snowdrifts on our heads.
- We are standing near the entrance to the house we live in.
- We've just got out of our cozy flat.
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I have underlined some problem areas:
These wrapped up from top to toe girls are me and my elder sister Nastya. Behind us everything is covered with snow butI you can discern the back of a wooden bench and branches of bird cherries. And our white hats made of fake fur look like snowdrifts on our heads.
We are standing near th
These wrapped up from top to toe girls are me and my elder sister Nastya. Behind us everything is covered with snow but
We are standing near th
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Thank you for checking my writing. I corrected underlined areas, but I can't understand what is wrong with "ringing frost"
These wrapped from tops to toes girls are me and my elder sister Nastya. Behind us everything is covered with snow, but you can discern the back of a wooden bench and branches of bird cherries, and our white hats made of fake fur looking like snowdrifts on our he
These wrapped from tops to toes girls are me and my elder sister Nastya. Behind us everything is covered with snow, but you can discern the back of a wooden bench and branches of bird cherries, and our white hats made of fake fur looking like snowdrifts on our he
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'Ringing frost' makes no sense to me. Could you explain it? You also need to fix the first underlining again. You cannot use 'rapped from tops to toes' as an attributive adjective.
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1) These girls, wrapped from tops to toes, are me and my elder sister.
2) My dictionary says that "ringing frost" = "extremely cold weather", but, as long as I'm going to speak with real people and not with dictionaries, I can find another words: "bitter frost". Does it make sense to you?
2) My dictionary says that "ringing frost" = "extremely cold weather", but, as long as I'm going to speak with real people and not with dictionaries, I can find another words: "bitter frost". Does it make sense to you?
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