Eyeeeeeeeeeees

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Eyes
Standing alone at night
You can see her cry
Tears like crystal
Thorns pierce
Your heart
The night yet undisturbed
Withstood your demise
Through a smile
A wink, and a
Gentle sparkle
In her eyes
With
Soft words
She'll remind you:
"I'll be alright"
Cradled inside your arms
Tears trickle through your flesh
Enthralled, drenched and embedded
Her pain afflicting your serendipity
Engrossing misery consumes the soul
Oh those eyes
How you wish to erase their memory
Oh those eyes
How you wish to stop their tears
Yet those eyes
When she laughs, she's got the power of a child in her eyes

Aileen · Accepted Answer

Hey you’re talented! I like this poem, nearly a poem anyway. I just can’t read it effectively, maybe the line breaks need to be reviewed. But what a nice surprise to see something special.

Radrook · Answer

I enjoyed reading this poem.
Very intense!

Maj · Answer

I have been looking,
in the dark room of my life
your eyes, my eyes,
I can't escape that sight,
It was a queen star
what shone the light,
a bright torch
through the royal veins
of blue blood,
your pictures developed
a glamorous film to survive,
Where is the murmur
of your voice to my music?
To the excruciating poem of my life?

I like this poem, but I don't know if it conveys any meaning? I would appreciate your comments on it.

Radrook · Answer

The meaning I derive is that of a lonely person who remembers having had someone special. The person wishes that the person would return and restore the light.

Darkness conveys sadness, despair, hopelessness.
Light conveys hope happiness.

Both are dependent on either the absence or presence of this special someone.

The eyes are traditionally considered windows to the soul or heart.
The poet seems to say that a deep union of heart and soul took place which was evident in the way each looked at one another.

The queen star might refer to wishes made and finally granted.
Which would raise the star to queen status.
Or else to the star is called a queen star because it granted the writer the status of queen by providing the companion sought and wished for.
Or the light or happiness was of such intensity as to make the star a queen in magnitude.

Memory is compared to a film developed in royal fluid within veins.
A woman once considered or treated like a queen has memories of her king?
In her royal mind his image took form and still survives?

The poet longs for the sound of his or her voice.
The music might be a dirge that accompanies the funeral of life.
Most likely it refers to brief happy moments which interrupt the sadness and that the writer wishes were accompanied by the loved one's voice.

The excruciation can be understood to refer to the writing process as well as the loneliness experienced by the writer or hypothetical protagonist.

Poets often write under distress.
When they are through writing, life seems as an extension of the poem just as the poem was an extension of their life.

IMHO

BTW
This reminds me of an incident that occured once when a guest poet visited a univercity and a professor took a half-hour interpreting one of his famous poems before his class. When the professor was through, the poet stood up and said that the professor's interpretation had been 100% wrong.

LOL

Maj · Answer

My eyes love the music of the sinner
My eyes love the beauty of the queen
My eyes love your naughty thoughts in the inn
My eyes love your mind in the wind

Scattered, spread, delighted
the feelings rhyme inside my head
dance in my funeral on my flowery bed.

Don't you think it is terrible? Well, I am feeling terrible.

Eyeeeeeeeeeees

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