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Contiluo Posted 9 years ago
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I posted an essay two weeks ago, but didn't get a full correction. Now, I post it again in paragraph as follows. Please help me make it sound natural. Thanks a lot.
Basketball is my favorite sport because it is fast, exciting and full of action. It’s a very entertaining sport and can be played by anyone, so I love to watch and play the game. A well-played basketball match can certainly evoke joy and delight and give me moments of relaxation and thrill. Meanwhile, I’ve always enjoyed playing basketball because that is what I love to do. I really enjoy playing this game and I practice a lot outside. I play basketball with my friends after school and on weekends. On weekdays, we play on the basketball courts at our school. We usually play about an hour before going home to finish our homework. On weekends, we usually play at different community parks for the entire afternoon. While I’m on the court, it gives me a clear mind. It is easy to dribble, shoot, and easy to do layups. I’m there just playing freely and have fun. Although I am not a good player myself, I enjoy every bit of this game.
Basketball is my favorite sport because it is fast, exciting and full of action. It’s a very entertaining sport and can be played by anyone, so I love to watch and play the game. A well-played basketball match can certainly evoke joy and delight and give me moments of relaxation and thrill. Meanwhile, I’ve always enjoyed playing basketball because that is what I love to do. I really enjoy playing this game and I practice a lot outside. I play basketball with my friends after school and on weekends. On weekdays, we play on the basketball courts at our school. We usually play about an hour before going home to finish our homework. On weekends, we usually play at different community parks for the entire afternoon. While I’m on the court, it gives me a clear mind. It is easy to dribble, shoot, and easy to do layups. I’m there just playing freely and have fun. Although I am not a good player myself, I enjoy every bit of this game.
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I've noted a couple of problems. Basketball is my favorite sport because it is fast, exciting and full of action. It’s a very entertaining sport and can be played by anyone, so I love to watch and play the game.
- I've noted a couple of problems.
- Basketball is my favorite sport because it is fast, exciting and full of action.
- It’s a very entertaining sport and can be played by anyone, so I love to watch and play the game.
- A well-played basketball match can certainly evoke joy and delight and give me moments of relaxation and thrill .
- Meanwhile, I’ve always enjoyed playing basketball because that is what I love to do.
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I've noted a couple of problems.
Basketball is my favorite sport because it is fast, exciting and full of action. It’s a very entertaining sport and can be played by anyone, so I love to watch and play the game. A well-played basketball match can certainly evoke joy and delight and give me moments of relaxation and thrill. Meanwhile, I’ve alw
Basketball is my favorite sport because it is fast, exciting and full of action. It’s a very entertaining sport and can be played by anyone, so I love to watch and play the game. A well-played basketball match can certainly evoke joy and delight and give me moments of relaxation and thrill. Meanwhile, I’ve alw
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Is the word 'thrill' inappropriate here in the sentence?
A well-played basketball match can certainly evoke joy and delight and give me moments of relaxation and thrill.
A well-played basketball match can certainly evoke joy and delight and give me moments of relaxation and thrill.
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contiluoIs the word 'thrill' inappropriate here in the sentence?Unnatural.
A well-played basketball match can certainly evoke joy and delight and give me both thrills and moments of relaxation.
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