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Describe a special place in memory

4.London natural history museum is located in London,capital of England and I access it by train.It is very popular ,has been around for many years and boasts a unique display. Today ice rinks are present in the museum ,which is rather ironic, you, I and others would most likely struggle to link the 2.
London natural history museum brought back vivid imagery of the creatures that fascinated me when I was much younger. Upon entering the museum I had flashbacks of scenes from walking with dinosaurs, a BBC documentary series. The skeletal structures of the prehistoric beasts were very interesting, for reasons such as depicting a colossal size in a number of dinosaurs one such example is Brachiosaurus, which towered over myself and every other structure and person in the museum. The number of dinosaur species were faitly large in number and include familiar dinosaurs such as Velociraptor. Aquatic organism bone structures which cannot be classified as dinosaurs such as whales were on show and this species in particular was enormous , both in body mass and length. In front of the structures is a description of the organism in its past and this included diet and habits as well as exact size and interactions with other organisms.The scientific term for this is interspecific species relationships.
The museum itself is large in size and attracts visitors from many different locations which include france and people native to the capital.There are interactive features scattered throughout the museum and security checks at the museum entrance.
On visiting the museum photoshoots were common, the atmosphere was busy and noisy.Upon visiting in the present day I would receive a somewhat nostalgic feeling. The museum in comparison to the zoos doesn't change in contents as frequently -live organisms are not present in the former and present in the latter. Both are heavily connected to organisms, the natural history museum relates to the organisms which inhabited earth many many years ago but the zoo is about present day organisms such as Elephants, Giraffes and Penguins much like a safari park but the latter differs mainly in that organisms are not necessarily restricted to enclosures.
I would forward to future visits and although it doesn't quite bring the same amount of personal satisfaction of that of London aquarium, there is no doubt,in my mind anyway ,that it boasts enough to give a pleasurable experience. I and probably others hold the opinion that London museum will improve with time,But this is not a definitive correlation since other places have deteriated with increasing age and also because we can't currently find a way to obtain a precise vision of the future, and this will continue to be the case unless scientific break throughs regarding the prediction of events are established.To conclude I thoroughly recommend this museum to others and I would class it has a missed opportunity if a visit was not paid sooner or later.Though this is just an opinion.