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T_nattawat Posted 18 years ago
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Essay:Agree/disagree? Television has detroyed communication among friends and family.
0 It's been quite sometime I've not write any essay. I have been really busy about getting into college and working as an F+B attendant. It seems like my writing skill get rush away after this couple months of not-writing-at-all; and it need to be brushed up a little(well, maybe whole lots). 02 br
00 Please look through, correct grammatical errors, and make some comment about the content. Also, please tell me the weaks ans the strengths of my essay. Thank you mak mak kub. 02 br
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00 Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has detroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. While some people have stated that television has destroyed communication among friends and family, I can only disagree with this statement. The main reasons is that television program is among the most popular topics in everyday talk. In addition, many sport lovers always find live sport program a great time for gathering. And, believe it or not, talking about weather forecast is a very effective way for many to start a conversation. 02 br
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00 To begin with, many often find themselves engaging in a conversation about last night shows on television. Teenagers and women are especially the big fans of television series and soap operas. And they find it enjoyable telling people, including family members and friends, about their impression on certain scenes and sharing their opinions of characters in the show they had watched. 02 br
00 Also, Many sport lovers have found live sport program a great time for gathering of friends. What is better than having friends around, talking about what is going on in the game, and maybe bet on the winner of the game. World Soccer, for example, always attracts a crowd of men; and this exciting game will last as their main talk for many weeks. This principle can also be applied to many family as well. 02 br
00 Finally, talking about weather forecast is a very effective way to start a conversation. Not everybody is born to be talkative. Many survey have indicated that a sentence like, “It's hot today, isn't it?” is one of the easiest and widely used tools in beginning a talk. A few minutes of watching television forecast would help one who is not talkative feel more comfortable when starting a conversation. 02 br
00 In conclusion, when one carefully look at the facts that most conversations are usually about soap operas and television programs. Men always love watching and talking about sport shows with their friends. And weather forecast can be a big help for many to begin chatting. This is why I strongly disagree with the remark that televisions make communication less important. 02 br
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00 PS: I have tried to revise and edit this essay a couple time by reading it aloud as well as finding as many errors as I could find; but I'm sure there still many of them in it. As you have read through my essay, do you have any suggestion about what I have missed when revising? Could you please suggest me some articles or something on this matter as well? Again, Thank you so much. I will try my best to keep my writing skill up. 0-
00 Please look through, correct grammatical errors, and make some comment about the content. Also, please tell me the weaks ans the strengths of my essay. Thank you mak mak kub. 02 br
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00 Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has detroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. While some people have stated that television has destroyed communication among friends and family, I can only disagree with this statement. The main reasons is that television program is among the most popular topics in everyday talk. In addition, many sport lovers always find live sport program a great time for gathering. And, believe it or not, talking about weather forecast is a very effective way for many to start a conversation. 02 br
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00 To begin with, many often find themselves engaging in a conversation about last night shows on television. Teenagers and women are especially the big fans of television series and soap operas. And they find it enjoyable telling people, including family members and friends, about their impression on certain scenes and sharing their opinions of characters in the show they had watched. 02 br
00 Also, Many sport lovers have found live sport program a great time for gathering of friends. What is better than having friends around, talking about what is going on in the game, and maybe bet on the winner of the game. World Soccer, for example, always attracts a crowd of men; and this exciting game will last as their main talk for many weeks. This principle can also be applied to many family as well. 02 br
00 Finally, talking about weather forecast is a very effective way to start a conversation. Not everybody is born to be talkative. Many survey have indicated that a sentence like, “It's hot today, isn't it?” is one of the easiest and widely used tools in beginning a talk. A few minutes of watching television forecast would help one who is not talkative feel more comfortable when starting a conversation. 02 br
00 In conclusion, when one carefully look at the facts that most conversations are usually about soap operas and television programs. Men always love watching and talking about sport shows with their friends. And weather forecast can be a big help for many to begin chatting. This is why I strongly disagree with the remark that televisions make communication less important. 02 br
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00 PS: I have tried to revise and edit this essay a couple time by reading it aloud as well as finding as many errors as I could find; but I'm sure there still many of them in it. As you have read through my essay, do you have any suggestion about what I have missed when revising? Could you please suggest me some articles or something on this matter as well? Again, Thank you so much. I will try my best to keep my writing skill up. 0-
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02 br 02 br 00 Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has detroyed communication among friends and family. 02 br 02 br 00 While some people have stated that television has destroyed communication among friends and family, I can only disagree with this statement.
- 02 br 02 br 00 Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
- Television has detroyed communication among friends and family.
- 02 br 02 br 00 While some people have stated that television has destroyed communication among friends and family, I can only disagree with this statement.
- The main 01 font 00 reasons is 02 font 00 that television program is among the most popular topics in everyday talk.
- In addition, many sport lovers always find live sport program a great time for gathering.
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0 Highlighted a few things for you to fix. 02 br
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00 Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television has detroyed communication among friends and family. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. 02 br
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1 b 00 Thank you very much. Can I ask you one question. Do you think that the arguements that I have made is not strong enough. I think it could be better but I just don't know how to develop a better arguement. Also I think that some parts of my essay are a little bit out of topic as well; what do you think? 02 b 0-
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0 I think your arguments are okay, though perhaps a bit too specific to certain types of TV programs. If you can generalize your ideas, then your arguments aren't tied to a specific type of show. 0-
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I think the last argument about the weather forecast is not that convincing, since people I know mostly get weather forecast information from textmessage, newspapaer,etc.
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HOW COULD TV BE BETTER???????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????????/
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actually, I think your agruement one and two are not so strong.... one is ok, but two ...
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