Essay : Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after high school. Discuss both views.

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Although some people are convinced that to succeed in a career, studying at university or college is the best choice, whereas, other people hold an absolute opposite opinion that getting a job right after graduating high school is better. This essay will discuss both points of view and my opinion will be given later.

On the one hand, continue studying at university brings students many advantages. Students will have chances to enhance their education, also gain academic qualifications which are required when applying for almost all of jobs. Therefore, they are able to obtain more job opportunities in the future, compared to people who stop studying since high school.

On the other hand, it is said that university is not the only way leading to success. Many students choose to seek a job when they have finished high school program. This is gonna bring them a handful of experience and necessary skills, which are things that many companies may ask in their employees. Thus, with this advantage, they can apply what they learned into the job and do their work better. They will soon earn an amount of money themselves, and thanks to that, they can live independently without having to rely on parents anymore. They can have all these things earlier that people who continue to universities up to four years.

To conclude, both choices have their own good points, but in my opinion, I will decide to go to universities to pursue higher education level so that I can get myself a good job.