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Killer93 Posted 12 years ago
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Essay Review
Was wondering if someone could review this essay for me and let me know where the errors are and how to fix them? So things like sentence structure, putting the essay into paragraphs, consistency of tense, person, number etc? Thanks
My mother and me gets along pretty well. The reason we do
is that me and her have alot of respect for one another, and
sticks to this respect; even when we don't have quite so much
respect for each others ideas. If you didn't respect one
another, you'd argue a lot about ideas. For instance, we don't
think at all the same about marriage. Take the whole idea of
getting married, we start our differences there. My mother is
all for it, she thinks everyone ought to be marry. If theres a
adult over the age of twenty-five who wasn't married, my mother
started trying to find somebody for them. In her eyes, nobdy is
a citizen, a complete person, or even a respectable human being,
unless they are married. I don't say marriage isn't all right,
for the right people but I could imagine going through life
without ever experience it. I certainly won't be married at
twenty-five. When it comes to premarital sex. There again we
part company. My old-fashioned mother believes in virginity for
girls and a little discreet experience for boys, she wants her
daughters to march down the aisle in white satin that means one
hundred percent pure guarantee and her sons to have a good time
and then settle down with girls like that. This is not for me; I
believe in living with you for a while before even thinking about
marrying you. Shes also old fashion about fidelity and divorce
after marriage, while I'm not. She wants no adultery and no
divorce. If anyone can ever makes it living like that once,
which I doubt, they certainly can't do it today. If I get
married I'll give it my best try, and any deal I make I'll intend
to keep but if I find I'm married to a welcher someone who don't
keep the other end of the bargin, why should I be stuck for life.
Luckily, as I said my mother and I love and respect one another,
she doesn't push her beliefs on me and I don't flaunt mine in
front of her. In the end, I hope her faith in me will always be
justify but I doubt that I'll be doing the marriage bit her way.
My mother and me gets along pretty well. The reason we do
is that me and her have alot of respect for one another, and
sticks to this respect; even when we don't have quite so much
respect for each others ideas. If you didn't respect one
another, you'd argue a lot about ideas. For instance, we don't
think at all the same about marriage. Take the whole idea of
getting married, we start our differences there. My mother is
all for it, she thinks everyone ought to be marry. If theres a
adult over the age of twenty-five who wasn't married, my mother
started trying to find somebody for them. In her eyes, nobdy is
a citizen, a complete person, or even a respectable human being,
unless they are married. I don't say marriage isn't all right,
for the right people but I could imagine going through life
without ever experience it. I certainly won't be married at
twenty-five. When it comes to premarital sex. There again we
part company. My old-fashioned mother believes in virginity for
girls and a little discreet experience for boys, she wants her
daughters to march down the aisle in white satin that means one
hundred percent pure guarantee and her sons to have a good time
and then settle down with girls like that. This is not for me; I
believe in living with you for a while before even thinking about
marrying you. Shes also old fashion about fidelity and divorce
after marriage, while I'm not. She wants no adultery and no
divorce. If anyone can ever makes it living like that once,
which I doubt, they certainly can't do it today. If I get
married I'll give it my best try, and any deal I make I'll intend
to keep but if I find I'm married to a welcher someone who don't
keep the other end of the bargin, why should I be stuck for life.
Luckily, as I said my mother and I love and respect one another,
she doesn't push her beliefs on me and I don't flaunt mine in
front of her. In the end, I hope her faith in me will always be
justify but I doubt that I'll be doing the marriage bit her way.
Top answer
Killer93 My mother and me gets That is very, very wrong and if the rest of your essay is like that, it needs major proofreading. Please look through it carefully yourself again and then post your careful revision.
- Killer93 My mother and me gets That is very, very wrong and if the rest of your essay is like that, it needs major proofreading.
- Please look through it carefully yourself again and then post your careful revision.
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Killer93My mother and me getsThat is very, very wrong and if the rest of your essay is like that, it needs major proofreading. Please look through it carefully yourself again and then post your careful revision.
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My mother and I get along pretty well. The reason we do is that me and her have a lot of respect for one another, and stick to this respect; even when we don't have quite so much respect for each other’s ideas. If you didn't respect one another, you'd argue a lot about ideas. For instance, we don't think at all the same about marriage. Take the whole idea of getting married, we start our differenc
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Killer93me and her haveThere's the next mistake. In general, your essay is far too casual. Written English is more formal—and more careful!—than conversation...which is what you are now writing.
Killer93how would I break this essay into proper paragraph format?Each new main idea is a new paragraph. Paragraphs should be a
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