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Rods Posted 17 years ago
A day with the animals. (is the title correct for capital letter usage/)
I was still lazing in my bed on a sunny Saturday morning when I heard my sister screaming with excitement. My father had offered to take us to visit the zoo. Immediately, I jumped out of bed and started getting ready for my trip. We drove in my father’s car. My father had already purchased the tickets online.
The first zoo creature I met turned out to be a rhinoceros. It stared at me warily and I grinned back with a goofy smile. I turned and found myself face to face with a tame hippopotamus. Unlike the rhinoceros, it was more concerned with basking in the morning sun than looking at me. I heard a noise and to my amusement there was a troop of chimpanzees fighting over a cap. The cap looked familiar, that is when I realized it was my mother’s cap.
Then there was a herd of Arabian oryx. The Zoo’s Curator explained to us the efforts initiated by the late President of the U.A.E to breed the Arabian oryx in captivity to prevent them from becoming extinct. The dolphins were my favourite animal. They amused the spectators with their tricks. They were named Jim, Tim, Kim and Sim. In a huge cage we saw a ferocious lioness licking her cubs. She growled and let out a roar when she was offered a chunk of meat. This sound made the giraffe scared.
I entered the main building, where the primates and reptiles are housed, and found a king cobra slithering in its enclosure. Also there was a separate section for the birds called the aviary. Admission to this was closed since the place was under repairs. An environment protection officer briefed us on the efforts of the U.A.E government to preserve endangered species.
All the excitement of the day made me tired and hungry. I slept during our drive back home. I dreamt of hawks and eagles laughing at my jokes, zebras and ostriches running across the open plains, and a tiger pouncing on me. I woke up with a jerk, only to find that it was my sister who pounced on me.
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A day with the animals. (is the title correct for capital letter usage/)
I was still lazing in my bed on a sunny Saturday morning when I heard my sister screaming with excitement. My father had offered to take us to visit the zoo. Immediately, I jumped out of bed and started getting ready for my trip. We drove in my father’s car. My father had already purchased the tickets online.
The first zoo creature I met turned out to be a rhinoceros. It stared at me warily and I grinned back with a goofy smile. I turned and found myself face to face with a tame hippopotamus. Unlike the rhinoceros, it was more concerned with basking in the morning sun than looking at me. I heard a noise and to my amusement there was a troop of chimpanzees fighting over a cap. The cap looked familiar, that is when I realized it was my mother’s cap.
Then there was a herd of Arabian oryx. The Zoo’s Curator explained to us the efforts initiated by the late President of the U.A.E to breed the Arabian oryx in captivity to prevent them from becoming extinct. The dolphins were my favourite animal. They amused the spectators with their tricks. They were named Jim, Tim, Kim and Sim. In a huge cage we saw a ferocious lioness licking her cubs. She growled and let out a roar when she was offered a chunk of meat. This sound made the giraffe scared.
I entered the main building, where the primates and reptiles are housed, and found a king cobra slithering in its enclosure. Also there was a separate section for the birds called the aviary. Admission to this was closed since the place was under repairs. An environment protection officer briefed us on the efforts of the U.A.E government to preserve endangered species.
All the excitement of the day made me tired and hungry. I slept during our drive back home. I dreamt of hawks and eagles laughing at my jokes, zebras and ostriches running across the open plains, and a tiger pouncing on me. I woke up with a jerk, only to find that it was my sister who pounced on me.
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I think the title should be capitalized. Judging from your work, you have a pretty solid foundation. I couldn't catch anything obvious in the way of mistakes.
- I think the title should be capitalized.
- Judging from your work, you have a pretty solid foundation.
- I couldn't catch anything obvious in the way of mistakes.
- I would though offer a couple of small suggestions rods The whole day of excitement from the the zoo visit had me exhausted and hungry.
- I fell asleep during our drive back home.
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I think the title should be capitalized. Judging from your work, you have a pretty solid foundation. I couldn't catch anything obvious in the way of mistakes. I would though offer a couple of small suggestions
rods
The whole day of excitement from the the zoo visit had me exhausted and hungry. I fell asleep during our drive back home. I dreamt of hawks and eag
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rodsA day with the animals. (is the title correct for capital letter usage/)The title should be capitalized as follows:
A Day with the Animals (Note the words which are in lower case and a full stop is not needed.)
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