0
Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
Can you please correct this essay without changing or deleting any part of the sentence.
Thank you
Today, world population is increasing, also it likely to increase from now on. But to increase population will make people in especially developing countries unhealthy, so world population should be controlled. This essay will tell two main reasons which are shortage of food and land, and unemployment.
First, not to be controlled world population will be shortage of food and land. If world population will increase, people in especially developing countries can not have enough food for all people. In addition, we do not have enough housing. Therefore many people can not live in home, also it will make a lot of homeless. Thus many people cannot live enough life.
Second, not to be controlled world population will make a lot of unemployment. People need to work for living, but they cannot work, and they cannot earn enough money. Therefore they can not do any thing, for example, to buy food, clothes, medicine.
In conclusion, not to be controlled world population will make people unhealthy, in addition it will be high mortality rate, and low life expectancy. Even if world population will increase continually, because of not enough life, a lot of people will die same amount of birth rate. Therefore, world population should be controlled to keep good health.
Essay & Composition Writing
Essay correction
Can you please correct this essay without changing or deleting any part of the sentence.
Thank you
Today, world population is increasing, also it likely to increase from now on. But to increase population will make people in especially developing countries unhealthy, so world population should be controlled. This essay will tell two main reasons which are shortage of food and land, and unemployment.
First, not to be controlled world population will be shortage of food and land. If world population will increase, people in especially developing countries can not have enough food for all people. In addition, we do not have enough housing. Therefore many people can not live in home, also it will make a lot of homeless. Thus many people cannot live enough life.
Second, not to be controlled world population will make a lot of unemployment. People need to work for living, but they cannot work, and they cannot earn enough money. Therefore they can not do any thing, for example, to buy food, clothes, medicine.
In conclusion, not to be controlled world population will make people unhealthy, in addition it will be high mortality rate, and low life expectancy. Even if world population will increase continually, because of not enough life, a lot of people will die same amount of birth rate. Therefore, world population should be controlled to keep good health.
Top answer
Of course not! How can we do that without making changes?
- Of course not!
- How can we do that without making changes?
Get the Weekly English Kit 📬
New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.
6 Answers
0
0
0
In BLUE My Suggested re-wording
IN RED-Corrections
Today, world population is increasing, [also it is likely to increase from now on] (and likely to continue growing). [But to increase population will make people unhealthy especially in developing countries, so world population should be controlled]. (Increasing the planet's population will lead to people becoming unhealthy, par
IN RED-Corrections
Today, world population is increasing, [also it is likely to increase from now on] (and likely to continue growing). [But to increase population will make people unhealthy especially in developing countries, so world population should be controlled]. (Increasing the planet's population will lead to people becoming unhealthy, par
00
hi, can you please help me? i have a sentence, and im not shure if it's correct
here it is:
At the same time with the development of technology and industry, the negative influence on the Earth began to be more harmful with every day.
here it is:
At the same time with the development of technology and industry, the negative influence on the Earth began to be more harmful with every day.
00
Hi Welcome to English Forums. - You really should start a new thread otherwise others won't see you question.
Cristina TomacAt the same timewithas the development of technology and industry, the negativeinfluenceimpacts on the Earth began to be increase daily.more harmful with every day.
00
Related Questions