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Shine94kuai Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

essay check plz.... jst a short piece

The short story 'Examination Day' by Henry Slesar,described a boy named Dickie, who just turned twelve, was put to death by the government. I was shocked by its twist ending. I could not understand why smart kids were killed for being too smart. However, it left me with a deep consideration on the Western education system. I could relate the government in the 'Examination Day' to the education ministry here in New Zealand. I thought the standard of NCEA was being set too low which stopped kids from reaching their full potential. Just like the government in the short story, where a highly intelligent kid was found guilty. This in a way, stopped people from developing their intelligence.
  

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Hi, Thank you for posting your writing. First of all I think that the word count is too low. In addition to this, an essay ought to have three main sections which are: Introduction, Body and Conclusion.

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Hi,

Thank you for posting your writing.

First of all I think that the word count is too low.

In addition to this, an essay ought to have three main sections which are: Introduction, Body and Conclusion.

Unless I did not understand your question I think you need to explain yourself a little bit more and organise your ideas.

You could visit my profile i
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