Essay about studying online

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There are more workers who work from home and more students who study from home. This is because computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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In recent years, thanks to digital technologies, working and studying at home has appeared as a popular trend and has been received more and more attention from the society. Although having numerous inevitable advantages, I personally believe that it will be a negative development if people choose to work at home.

Despite of having capability to resolve numerous problems, there are several remained issues that computer technologies cannot assist human to resolve. The most obvious issue is that computer technologies are unable to assist human in resolving sudden issues, which require rapid intervenes from technical experts. Chemists and nuclear physicists, for example, are carrying out jobs that need the appearance of responsible human because mechanical devices themselves are still not optimized to resolve problems, which is usually complicated and widely dangerous to the surround areas. Additionally, studying with teacher who live faraway also possesses many potential downsides due to the lack of interaction between teachers and students. In order to achieve a great performance on studying, students must own the opportunity to exchange knowledge and debate with instructors and this chance can be alleviated if students choose to study from distance, because of the fact that online teachers cannot give enough time for taking care all students.

Channeling into working and studying online also induce negative influence into both physical and mental health. In order to work and study online by employing computer technology, using of electronic screens is considered as a mandatory requirement. Electronic screens and other types of digital devices, such as headphones, are always criticized by health experts because of their harmful effects to human’s organs like eyes and ears. Another dreadfully visible downside of working online is that it results the shortage of social connection, which can induce several mental diseases. For example, depression can be strengthened if people choose to stay to work at home instead of working with other companions. Although this problem harmfully damages mental life, it can be easily removed by joining in work with groups of people.

In conclusion, I personally assert that working and studying online totally is negative development, despite of some potentially positive benefits it can provide.