Essay-2: Correction

0Hi, I am posting another essay. Again, it is for my personal improvement for my future IELTS exam. My exam is scheduled on March 31, 2007. So I am describing some tables, graphs etc. Hope you will understand my request and check my essay for any grammatical mistakes. If you were an examiner, what score would you give?05002br
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00This table is given on page no. 125 of IELTS preparation book by Wendy Sahanaya and two more writers. I am describing it below. 02br
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00The table shows the average incomes of male and female scientists who work for the National Institute of Health. Scientists working for the institute are divided in to two broad categories – MDs and PhDs. Table also shows the salary difference between male scientists and female scientists.02br
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00There are total 483 male MDs in comparison to 71 female MDs. The average salary of male MDs is slightly higher than the average salary of female MDs. The number of male PhD scientists is 473, whereas the number of female PhD scientists is 118. The average salary difference between male and female PhD scientists is about 2.5 times greater than the average salary difference between male and female MD scientists. 02br
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00The number of male lab chief MD scientists is 20 times greater than the number of female lab chief MD scientists. But female lab chief MD scientists’ average salary is higher than the male lab chief MD scientists’ average salary. Female scientists of only this category have higher salaries than their male counterparts. The average salary of male and female lab chief PhD scientists is almost similar.02br
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00The number of male section chief MD and PhD scientists is several times greater than the number of female section chief MD and PhD scientists. The average salary difference between male and female scientists in these categories is almost same as the average salary difference between male and female MD scientists. The staff fellow PhD scientists, both males and females have the lowest salaries of all. 02br
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00From this table, we can conclude that females working at same positions are getting lower salaries than their male counterparts. Furthermore, the number of male scientists having MD and PhD is much more than females. It is a surprising fact that there is still gender discrimination even in highly educated positions and departments. 00 02br
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00Time – 24 mins, length = 300 words010id1