ESSAY

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Question 1
• Which country do you want to study abroad and why?
• How will you contribute Vietnamese society based on experience & knowledge from your study abroad?

Lately, my brother has gradually terminated the crucial procedures and papers packed into suitcases ahead to Japan. Probably, my eyes towards him completely changed from ordinary to admiration. Was a boy to throw himself into entertainment day after day, he finally might look for his own particular purpose and try his best to achieve his goal. Only a few days more will he reach the place of dream he unfailingly fancies, takes a deep breath and studies in an exquisite environment interacting and making friends with the natives and peers. I can vaguely sense how much effort he puts into this important matter and his upcoming plans. It is undoubted that Japan became the place making a boy always surrounded with playing games hiding himself in a stifling situatiom made up his mind to explore a world full of novelty that he was never given an opportunity to happen.
Strangely, not under 1001 times did I difficultly figure out where I will stay and take lessons for four years straight in university. Once, me and my friends attended a seminar about studying abroad in Japan. Surprisingly, the frontal scenes of the learning settings of colleges in Japan blew me away. It all fits as what I had wished and desired for a long time ago and a sense of familiarity suddenly emerged on my soul travelling with the incredibly unadorned lifestyle. Japan has been perfectly marked for my upcoming studying lectures and daily life. Excitingly, I have studied all three Japanese alphabets and also spent time on making enquires about Japanese culture. The more I inquired into Japanese things, the better my knowledge was. Japan is fulfilled with fresh atmosphere occurring no contamination. There are super-speed subway trains appear punctually and the mouth-watering cuisines are meticulously prepared and beautifully presented by professional chefs. However, things that come better, I highly respect the tenacious will to overcome challenges of Japanese. Sitting on the Pacific Ring of Fire, it is an area prone to seismic shifts that create earthquakes and volcanic activity. Thanks to inhabitants’ solidity, they can have enough strength to go through extreme disasters such as snowstorm and representatively, the destruction including severe earthquake and tsunami in 2011 called Tohoku. Japanese’s mightiness lifted them a finger to overcome catastrophe together.

And the top prerequisite that ultimately affects my choice in future path in Japan is the book “Totto-Chan: The Little Girl At The Window” by author Tetsuko Kuroyanagi. Tomoe Primary School not only showed up as a quintessential schooling environment but also a noteworthy education platform for uncountable students all around the world. Countlessly, I hold this precious book tight in my arms, kept my eyes close and conceptualize myself as the little child Totto-chan embarking on marvelous things in Tomoe, where every pupil has all rights to study their favorite subjects without prohibition or without parents and teachers’ complaints, or are not opposed with hidden boxes consisting of mature thoughts and movements. The old school where Totto-chan used to pursue rejected her due to her enthusiastic personality, but only when she changed her school into Tomoe did she receive her first compliment ever in her life from the noble old male principle: “You are such a good girl!”. Although in the end, this secret education background was fallen into oblivion by bomb layers in severe wars, even Mr.Kobayashi – the principle’s devotion met the unhappily ending but his saying still touched my heart deeply, “What kind of school shall we build next?”. Behind his saying laying the respectable endurance will overcome all types of challenges by Japanese – a cherished characteristic not many countries, even the developed ones have enough strength to own it.

So in the perfect country Japan, Can i have a chance to spend my unniversity time in Japan? I am trying to make my wish come true. And you?

So what is the point of studying abroad?
“My parents encouraged me that I should study abroad for the sake of jobs hunting more easily, and if it is partly fine then live straight there”. That was my peer’s answer when she was reckoned why she had the desire to be an international student. Given the fact that many people choose to study abroad for multiple reasons, one passionately digs in absolutely new sky, one wants to broaden their horizon, one collects unforgettable memories, one finds the enthusiasm in enrolling in different culture. Several people have an urge for settling down in the exact country they study abroad but in contrast the others choose to come back home and serve it. It seems to me that having a chance to experience an advanced education will be the boost for my studying path and returning to Vietnam in order to develop my major.
Vietnam has been speed-up evolving in numerous aspects through near decades, additionally the young also bring off major concern about national issues plus expand the country with positive trend. A large number of people are capable of absorbing knowledge as much as ones in internationality spending four years to learn receiving the same amount of salaries. Where is the focal point? Did we carry learnt expertise from developed countries into Vietnam environment? Manipulation does not dictate outrageously the same keys between two countries due to distinct portraits in economy and society, but manipulation is to establish horizon flexibly to an extent and slowly apply it in domestic education.
If I approach the standards to study overseas in Japan, not only insight will I take but also the lifestyle and great personalities of citizens, ways they adore and protect their home, how they treat each other equally and respect for their neighborhood. Knowledge only comes out fantastic when it is practiced accurately and well-awared.
Media is my chosen major. It has my appreciation, obviously, but it also delivers huge benefit for humans. For instance, a photo posted by MC Phan Anh on Facebook appealing people to advocate compatriots in Central Vietnam after extreme tsunami has received positive reaction as people donating about 700 million VND just after 10 hours. Or the picture of a Syrian child sleeping like a peaceful angel on Bodrum coast passed away on the way from Syria to the Promised Land where no war exists. Her family’s dream reaching the new hopeful land could not come true but it enlarged the immigration policy and many immigrants have been backed up. That is the miracle of media.
After finishing media program overseas, my plan is to return home and level up Vietnam’s media. Each major is the symbol of a double-edged sword. All contains optimistic side and the downside. Vietnam Media has confronted a great depression when technology rapidly rocketed, it directly influenced citizens on meeting false information which resulted in large-scale consequences. Our young generation carry a mission uncompleted in order to manage and diminish the negative aspect of media and use it as a leading tool for conveying effective and intriguing data to everyone, assist them to build faith in domestic channels and several accurate knowledge. Many Vietnameses have lost their confidence in online-posted information on social medias. Actually, they become sick and tired of false data or clickbait. We have the responsibilities for recovering their hope, putting a stop to distorted information which has been widespread recently. Every single post, news or simply a poster must contain true data and marketing staff needs to take action if something himself/herself placing in public goes wrong.
Most importantly, the question is, how we – the people coming back to Vietnam in the near days for self-development will deal with marvelous horizon? Should we stubbornly keep it as personal property and it perceptually fades away day by day, even it provides beneficial perspective for Vietnameses? It is completely up to you.

To be honest, there is no need to flying back to Vietnam. The important thing is you are a good person and devotes back to community as much as possible, Vietnam will not selfish and keeping you by its side. Trust me!
Question 2
• In daily study, do you have special effective study tip?
(Please take some photos and explain about your study tips.)
• Is time management effective to your study? Please explain how you apply time management in daily study and how this affects to your study. (please take photos and explain)
Obviously, I am not that kind of person who is capable of learning by heart or have high IQ. Specifically, most students assume learning is not only too incomprehensible but makes their mood turn blue, let alone its burden on students’ shoulders. However, I have finally ended up picking up some tricky tips suitable for all ages of students. Ones I am going to outline below is deceptively simple but I still looking forward to this would be helpful for those with the desire to be able to have effective learning methods.

First thing we need to check out is our daily school timetables. Different person owns different school time frame. When people have leisure time and are out of charge of schooling, there are some possibilities such as some will immediately do their homework and self-study at classes with a view to save a huge amount of time, the others may finish their school by night although it will do harm to their health but it is unfortunately the most delicate moment of the day, but on contrary some people are at variance with staying up late that they decide to become an early bird. There are several distinctive time patterns for learning specific subjects. Statistically, 4:30 hours or 6 hours is perfectly time for assimilating theoretical subjects and social ones like geography or history; from 7 to 10 hours is in line with language courses and sciences. We probably can use the appropriate amount of time to learn the appropriate subjects.
Next, using highlighters with the right purposes.

I have bought substantial highlight pens in recent days and to my surprise it worked highly well that my brain gave birth to a fear - I realized myself did highlight almost the whole book. Our mentality always stand a permanent missing or not knowing what to get up to resulting in misusing these pens. If you take a look at my books now you may think it as a coloring and you cannot learn anything with an over-colorful book. I moved on having thrown away all my color-faded-out highlighters and only left some important ones. Each one of the items contributes to the main note. The highlighter is not necessarily important and the most complete we need to take care about is the highlighted sentence that the whole array of knowledge from the item you emphasize on comes up with the memory lines. That is the real meaning of highlighters.
Learning when you are ready for.

Once, my mother forced me to study the inflexibly certain time frame that she wanted. Unfortunately, we began getting a stiff controversy over this matter. If you ever had a bad day or a horrible mood and desperately be in need of taking a rest and relaxing, learning something new is completely impossible. With due regard to consider learning as the ways we add a large amount of interesting knowledge in life and what we have to do is what we want, not being under obligation to study. Set the reasonable target to take actions and authorize us to enjoy spare time. Moreover, the feeling of winning and competition prevail in us for good. Right after the accomplishment or mission completed we raised hormones of happiness dramatically and thanks to those joyful hormones we grow better motivation and better understanding to accomplish other goals. Imagine things will happen like this, you set your goal to study Math within 45’, after that you will feel relieved and comfortably watch your favorite movie for 15 minutes. Quickly learning to reach a circuit from 3 to 4 hours cannot be effective by learning for a small period of time. Take yourself a proper day of rest after a stressful period because you deserve it. I used to be pressured and exhausted when I was up to my ears and did nothing but find some anti-drowsiness medicines to be able to study overnight. And you clearly can guess what the result is. I find it do no use and detrimentally put my current health state in ruin. Your sleeping pattern is out of control and is not provided enough energy that it constantly signals you to rest and take some short naps. Bear in mind to sleep enough every single day for 8 hours or at least that is enough for your health. Adolescents will not easy for us to quit sleeping hours. Love yourself and you will find it surprised by your body improvement.

One of the most needed skillful factor is time management. It determines the major rate of your success and how you handle your work. Imagine if you are a clever, gifted students but lying on bed and eating like a pig wasting your time from dusk till dawn, all skills you have learned since young will slowly evaporate into the air. How can a person succeed in doing several things but another just finish one thing while both of them have had the same 24-hour day? It depends on time-management technique. Useful time control does not only allow you to achieve your goals altogether but also give you a meaningful life. As soon as I realized such advantages, intelligence is not marked as the most crucial factor. As aforementioned, cleverness is something I can’t reach since I was a child and being in control of time does necessitate. Each person owns different time bank that through many years I have gathered some time control habits that work out.

First, preparing yourself for a large number of things happened the next days. As easy as it may sound, unfortunately it appears harder than saying. Remember to bring a portable notebook because working relation or academic activities are available to students such as ours, especially with those involved in clubs or extracurricular activities. Once you've owned one, we might start arranging work or homework as necessary and urgent from top to bottom. Draw a window including 5 columns according to level of ascending necessity: unnecessary – quite necessary – necessary – ultra-necessary – acute. If there are two works which deadlines come simultaneously, first one is personnel and the other is related to collective, the superior should be the collective job. Don't let your individual affect both stuff.

Second: Allocate reasonable time for each issue and follow it on time, try your best to not permit this job to take away the time of another job. For instance, you need to finish an assignment for math lesson and make up your mind to finish it from 7 P.M to 8 P.M. You may find out the urge to finish it, but you go on surfing Facebook to 7:15 P.M and then start working. Being distracted by entertainment tools lengthen your time that you cannot accomplish your first work, after it is fulfilled, you no longer have time to take a rest and then commence doing the next part, making the productivity of the second one counterproductive. The most striking feature of punctuality is not only support you to manage your time effectively but also to form the habit of checking up on time from the smallest things. A clever strategy is to use these great applications to make notes and rule out time efficiently. Don’t procrastinate at any second.

Smartphones are the major weakness of the young without doubt. Instead of taking a look at some nonsense videos on Facebook, make a fresh start with using Clock to arrange your jobs, taking advantage of Reminder app on Iphone to emphasize you what to do, taking notes most necessary things and also downloading other software such as Trello – a convenient app which is in charge of backing you up to do plans most fruitfully.

Save the best for last: concentration and determination.
Did you ever question yourself, what does this job mean to you? Although how detailed your plan is but you neither try it nor complete it, you only time-consume worthy time on the plan. Were you to waste time on something you don’t even lift a finger to meet its demand, could you ever be passionate enough to do it again? Ask yourself why we do this, why it outweighs other jobs and what lessons it will bring to me. Bearing in mind one thing, we are stronger than we think.

“ IF WE WANT TO BE MORE PRODUCTIVE, YOU NEED TO BECOME MASTER OF YOUR MINUTES” - Crystal Paine.