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Science is developing very fast and nowadays scientists have already succeeded in cloning. People have different attitude to it. Some of them believe that cloning industry must be controlled by the government but others do not think so. Now I would like to express my point of view on this problem.
I consider that the government should oversee human cloning research. First of all, these experiments are not safe enough and seem to be dangerous. There is a big risk of abnormal effects. What is more, scientists do not know how clones will behave and what kind of being they will be.
However, scientists claim that human cloning is absolutely safe and there is no necessity for governments to control it. They state that cloning gives people new medical possibilities. We can use clones to create organs for transplantations or duplicate someone who was loved and died.
In addition, human cloning will change our ideas about the value of a human life as we might switch from having children to manufacturing them and the results of this action can be unpredictable.
In conclusion, this issue is far from solving yet, but I am sure that human cloning must be under strict control of the government because one wrong action can lead to disaster.

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

I have challenged some of your essay's statements because they are not logical to me. Your essay would benefit if you define what you mean by "cloning" versus general genetic research. Anyway, feel free to ignore my commentary. It is only intended for you to make your points stronger and clearer.

I highlighted some mistakes in grammar.

Could you read my essay and tell me if it is correct or correct my mistkes.
Thank you an advance.

Science (Should be "technology" ) is developing very fast and ~~nowadays~~ scientists have already succeeded in cloning (cloning what?). People have different attitude (If there are differences, there is more than one attitude.) to it. Some of them believe that (missing word) cloning industry (Is there a whole industry that makes clones? Like the automobile industry that makes cars?) must be controlled by the government but others do not think so. Now I would like to express my point of view on this issue / subject ~~problem~~.

I consider that the government should oversee (Do you mean prohibit?) human cloning research. First of all, these experiments are not safe enough and seem to be dangerous. There is a big risk of abnormal effects (abnormalities). What is more, scientists do not know how clones will behave and what kind of being they will be (Comment: The clone of a fruit fly will be a fruit fly. The clone of a dog will be a dog. What do you mean that the scientists do not know what kind of being a clone is? Identical twins or triples are a "natural" kind of a clone in that the individuals are genetically identical to each other. Don't we know how they behave, or what kind of beings they are?).

However, scientists claim that human cloning is absolutely safe (You just said that these experiments are not safe, even dangerous. That means that you consider that scientists are liars. Is that what you mean?) and there is no necessity for governments to control it. They state that cloning gives people new medical possibilities (I don't understand. What possibilities? A clone is a genetic duplicate of a living organism. There is nothing new genetically.). We can use clones to create organs for transplantations (Do you mean the clone will be killed to harvest their organs?) or duplicate someone who was loved and died.

In addition, human cloning will change our ideas about the value of a human life as we might switch from having children to manufacturing them and the results of this action can be unpredictable.
In conclusion, this issue is far from solving yet, but I am sure that human cloning must be under strict control of the government because one wrong action (Does the government always know the right action? What if the government wants "superior" citizens and decides that cloning is a good policy?) can lead to disaster.

Tortiks · Answer

Thank you very much for checking,Your correction helped me a lot

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My English isn't very well, but I'm trying to improve it. By the way, have You seen "The Island" movie (2005)? It's about human clones which were created for organ harvesting, surrogate motherhood and etc. for their sponsors. Awesome movie!

AlpheccaStars · Answer

My English isn't very good, but I'm trying to improve it. (Use good for an adjective.)
I don't write very well. (Use well for an adverb.)

I didn't see the movie, but there are many science fiction movies which portray a grim picture of the future. These are dystopias with some basis in science. But they are not really scientific. Don't use them as science references in your essays.

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