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Marrying young is a mistake

A perfect marriage is something that the most of us wanted. Successful marriage requires falling in love many times, always with the same person. There are the factors that affect the marriege and one of them is youth.

Many people believe that marrying young is a mistake. They think that people have to be enough positive that they want to have a huge commitment to another person, but more and more people are not positive enough. They are too much immature. For example if one young married couple get a child, they will not can take care for him. Worldwide there are many examples of lone mothers with children and in the majority of cases they married when they were young.
Other might argue that marrying young is not a mistake. If someone find a person and fall in love with, ages are not important. Furthermore there is no sign that young married couple can not be mature as much as one thirty years old couple for example.

In conclusion I would like to express my opinion. I agree with that statement, because young people think that they found their soulmate and they get married as quick as it is possible. Otherwise we can get married any time we want but we have to think about everything whatever happens.
  

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I have underlined some problem areas. Please correct them and post your revised essay here. A perfect marriage is something that the most of us wanted .

  • I have underlined some problem areas.
  • Please correct them and post your revised essay here.
  • A perfect marriage is something that the most of us wanted .
  • Su ccessful marriage requires falling in love many times, always with the same person.
  • There are the factors that affect the marriege and one of them is youth.
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I have underlined some problem areas. Please correct them and post your revised essay here.

A perfect marriage is something that the most of us wanted. Successful marriage requires falling in love many times, always with the same person. There are the factors that affect the marriege and one of them is youth.

Many people believe that mar
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A perfect marriage is something is what makes most of us wants. Successful marriage requires falling in love many times, always with the same person. There are thing that affect the marriage and one of them is youth.

Many people believe that marrying young is a mistake. They think that people have to be enough mature and old for commitment to another person, but more and more people are n
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A perfect marriage is something is what makes that most of us want. A successful marriage requires falling always being in love many times, always with the same person. There are many factors that determine whether a marriage will succeed, thing that affect the marriage and one of them is believed to be age.

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