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Please check it .I have to do a big test next month. I should practice my writing ability.

I know that it's quit bad…that's the reason that I'm practicing it…

I need to write a latter to a sick child

Dear Philip

I hope you feel well. It's very frustrating to know that you've got a problem and further more to know that you can't deal with your illness.

I'm happy that your family support you. It's meaningful for you and it can help youto get over the difficult periods when the pain gets strong.

When something hurt to me ' I think about a place, which I wish to be in. like beach. I just fantasy about a hilarious vacation.

You are a valiant and brilliant guy . I know that you can survive it. I wish that next year it all will be over and both of us will travel to .

I have been there once, but I want to be there and to have fun again with you. We'll have a great time together!

With all my love and appreciation

Yours forever

Def

Thanks(:

Benny777 · Accepted Answer

Hey I just see a few things that need to be corrected. I tried to help you yesterday but as soon as I submitted my reply, the site was done for maintenance and I lost it!

When something hurt to me

I'm happy that your family support you.

Usually the verbs "hurt" and "support" do not need an -s at the end of them. But when the noun before it is in the 3rd person, like family or something, then the verb diretly following it will an -s at the end of it, so long as you are speaking in the present tense. Commit that to memory, if it's a 3rd person noun or pronoun, and in the presence tense, that is when you need to add "s" after the verb.

When something hurt to me

Saying "something hurt me" is enough, it's inherent in those words that the hurting is being directed towards you, and thus "to" is redundant, it's not needed because it's b eing expresed without "to".

I think about a place, which I wish to be in.

If someone you knew was leaving your house, what would you ask them? Would you ask them "which" are you going, or would you ask them "where" are you going? The answer is obviously where, because where somebody is, refers to what place they are in. In this instance you are thinking about a place, so where instead of which is what you want to use.

like California beach.

When we use the word "beach", we are not assuming that there is one beach in every state. Rather there are many different beaches in the state of California. Instead say, "like a beach in California". Or even, "like my favorite beach in California".

I just fantasy about a hilarious vacation

Two things about this sentence. 1) Fantasy is a noun, and you are using it as if it were a verb. You want to use the verb fantasize. 2) Hilarious refers to something that is funny, and the place you are describing doesn't seem to be a funny place, but rather a relaxing place. I think you are better off saying "good" or "great" vacation.

Hope this helps

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