Enquiry letter for an applied position...pls help me correct it..

Im going to send this letter to the Director of YYY Company who interviewed me in last week for query my status of the position that I applied. Would you please help me review this letter? I dont want to make any mistakes in this letter. Thanks so much in advanced.



Dear Mr. Paul,

Firstly, Im sorry to disturb you with this email. Because I had some updated information and need your help.

During the interview about the Core Network Technologist DaNang at your company, you said that I should wait an offer email from Human Resource Department from . It has been 10 days from that interview and I have not received any email. I know that I should wait more but there is some updated information with my current job at AAA. Last week, my senior manager ask me to transfer to his new project in June 10th for investigating new product and going on-site for training and working as an interface between customer and this project team. I knew that this is an interesting chance but working for YYY, the company that I admire, is a chance cannot be missed.

Would you please let me know whether I was accepted for the Core Network Technologist Da Nang? If yes, I will tell my manager about my decision.

Thank you for reading this letter. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Best Regards,
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