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Please help me to correct this short passage.
Do you always want to buy the latest technology or are you happy with an older model? Why?
I always want to purchase latest technology because it always upgrade and innovate so that it can be suitable with the modern lifestyle and lead towards the new era, bring us pleasure and happiness, lay the defatigation behind, it makes customer want to buy impulsively, but it’s often accompanied with the price, it costs an arm and a leg to purchase any latest technology, it means that you have to quids in.
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Your sentences are too long and badly structured. Many words are not used correctly. I have highlighted the problem text.
- Your sentences are too long and badly structured.
- Many words are not used correctly.
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Your sentences are too long and badly structured. Many words are not used correctly. I have highlighted the problem text.
I always want to purchase (missing word) latest technology because it always upgrade and innovate (wrong usage) so that it can be suitable with the modern
0You have many mistakes.
Instead of just one long sentence, try to rewrite this as several shorter sentences. Long sentences causelearners to make more errors.
Then post your work again and we will comment further.
What do these words mean? defatigation / quids
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