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Anonymous Posted 15 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
English, Passion essay.
i was wondering if my sentenced is properly use and does it make scense?
Two of my oldest brothers; Bobby being the oldest and Carlos, were both unaware of how important education can be and how it can benefit they’re future living with job stability. Though both of them are currently employed; with their GED being the highest level of education completed, this world we live in now is more expensive, even faster paced and the scale for higher education is in great value for jump starting a career.
Two of my oldest brothers; Bobby being the oldest and Carlos, were both unaware of how important education can be and how it can benefit they’re future living with job stability. Though both of them are currently employed; with their GED being the highest level of education completed, this world we live in now is more expensive, even faster paced and the scale for higher education is in great value for jump starting a career.
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I'd whittle it down to the important parts: My two older brothers were unaware of how important an education can be and how it could have benefited their futures with job stability. Both are employed, but today's world is more expensive and faster paced, and higher education is ever more valuable for jump-starting a career.
- I'd whittle it down to the important parts: My two older brothers were unaware of how important an education can be and how it could have benefited their futures with job stability.
- Both are employed, but today's world is more expensive and faster paced, and higher education is ever more valuable for jump-starting a career.
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I'd whittle it down to the important parts:
My two older brothers were unaware of how important an education can be and how it could have benefited their futures with job stability. Both are employed, but today's world is more expensive and faster paced, and higher education is ever more valuable for jump-starting a career.
My two older brothers were unaware of how important an education can be and how it could have benefited their futures with job stability. Both are employed, but today's world is more expensive and faster paced, and higher education is ever more valuable for jump-starting a career.
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