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English321 Posted 15 years ago
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English paragraph fixing.
Fix the follwing:
One should never accept another persons opinion about a movie unless you know they have the same theatrical tastes as you. For example, the movie Pulp Fiction. I liked the character development and the action but my girlfriend didn't like it. Being from a small town, the movies storyline was not appearling, I guess one never knows how some people will react to certain movies.
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My edited version is as follows:
One should never accept another persons' opinion about a movie, unless you know they have the same theatrical taste as you. For example, I liked the character development, and the action in the movie, Pulp Fiction, but my girlfriend didn't like it. Being from a small town, the storyline of the movie was not very appealing to me. I guess one never knows how others will react to certain movies.
One should never accept another persons opinion about a movie unless you know they have the same theatrical tastes as you. For example, the movie Pulp Fiction. I liked the character development and the action but my girlfriend didn't like it. Being from a small town, the movies storyline was not appearling, I guess one never knows how some people will react to certain movies.
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My edited version is as follows:
One should never accept another persons' opinion about a movie, unless you know they have the same theatrical taste as you. For example, I liked the character development, and the action in the movie, Pulp Fiction, but my girlfriend didn't like it. Being from a small town, the storyline of the movie was not very appealing to me. I guess one never knows how others will react to certain movies.
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As it reads now, the storyline was from a small town. However, in the original, I would have assumed it meant the girlfriend was from the small town and that's why she didn't like the storyline (though the connection is not clear to me). Your commas in the second sentence around "and the action in the movie" are unnecessary, and where they are currently placed, the second one is wrong.
- As it reads now, the storyline was from a small town.
- However, in the original, I would have assumed it meant the girlfriend was from the small town and that's why she didn't like the storyline (though the connection is not clear to me).
- Your commas in the second sentence around "and the action in the movie" are unnecessary, and where they are currently placed, the second one is wrong.
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As it reads now, the storyline was from a small town.
However, in the original, I would have assumed it meant the girlfriend was from the small town and that's why she didn't like the storyline (though the connection is not clear to me).
Your commas in the second sentence around "and the action in the movie" are unnecessary, and where they are currently placed, the second one i
However, in the original, I would have assumed it meant the girlfriend was from the small town and that's why she didn't like the storyline (though the connection is not clear to me).
Your commas in the second sentence around "and the action in the movie" are unnecessary, and where they are currently placed, the second one i
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The first one is a given paragraph and I am asked to fix erros in the paragraph which is the first one I posted. The second one is the one I attempted to fix. It gets difficult since English isn't my first language and it's going to be the biggest barrier for me to get into university because of it. So I don't know if my paragraph is good or not.
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Your corrected first sentence shows some confusion about the number of person/persons whose opinions you're considering.
If you say "another person," then there's only one. Thus you would have to write "person's," not "persons'." And yet the second half of your sentence speaks of "they" -- clearly in the plural.
You need to decide if it's one person, in which case it would be "
If you say "another person," then there's only one. Thus you would have to write "person's," not "persons'." And yet the second half of your sentence speaks of "they" -- clearly in the plural.
You need to decide if it's one person, in which case it would be "
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It should be be ...
One should never accept another person's opinion
The apostrophe should be after the n because personis singular.
One should never accept another person's opinion
The apostrophe should be after the n because personis singular.
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Hi,
One should never accept another persons opinion about a movie unless you know
Don't mix 'one' and 'you'.
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One should never accept another persons opinion about a movie unless one knows
One should never accept another persons opinion about a movie unless you know
Don't mix 'one' and 'you'.
Either
One should never accept another persons opinion about a movie unless one knows
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