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Paddy Posted 21 years ago
English Newbie: My Girl
Hi All,
English is not my first language and I am still learning it. Here is my first poetry, I wrote with the little english I know. Please ignore grammatical errors and please do comment
Thanks,
Pradeep
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Angels were artists
Trees were brushes
Flowers were colors
Sky was canvas
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Crafted nobly by the nature
Her Body
Like?
An Idol of Aphrodite
Made by the almighty
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her Skin
Like?
Velvety fabrics
With a moonbeam touch
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her hairs
Like?
Dark black clouds
Floating in the sky
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her lips
Like?
Red rose petals
Jelling together
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her Clothes
Like?
A creeper takes hold
On a stem
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her laughter
Like?
Hundreds of songbirds
Singing together
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her Walk
Like?
A female serpent moving slowly
In the sand
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Angels were artists
Trees were brushes
Flowers were colors
Sky was canvas
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Crafted nobly by the nature
***-----***
English is not my first language and I am still learning it. Here is my first poetry, I wrote with the little english I know. Please ignore grammatical errors and please do comment
Thanks,
Pradeep
***-----***
Angels were artists
Trees were brushes
Flowers were colors
Sky was canvas
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Crafted nobly by the nature
Her Body
Like?
An Idol of Aphrodite
Made by the almighty
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her Skin
Like?
Velvety fabrics
With a moonbeam touch
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her hairs
Like?
Dark black clouds
Floating in the sky
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her lips
Like?
Red rose petals
Jelling together
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her Clothes
Like?
A creeper takes hold
On a stem
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her laughter
Like?
Hundreds of songbirds
Singing together
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Her Walk
Like?
A female serpent moving slowly
In the sand
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Angels were artists
Trees were brushes
Flowers were colors
Sky was canvas
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Crafted nobly by the nature
***-----***
Top answer
english is not my native language too. and i understand your poem little. in my opinion , it is very good.
- english is not my native language too.
- and i understand your poem little.
- in my opinion , it is very good.
- i think i should study from you.
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english is not my native language too. and i understand your poem little. in my opinion , it is very good.
i think i should study from you.
i think i should study from you.
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Poetry is the easiest of the literary skills to write - and by far the most difficult to master.
If you have a desire to improve your English, reading and analysing poetry is the way to go. You'll be amazed how quickly your English improves.
As to your poem. In my opinion a lot more work is needed here. The Imagination and imagery is fine but in such abundance as to wear the r
If you have a desire to improve your English, reading and analysing poetry is the way to go. You'll be amazed how quickly your English improves.
As to your poem. In my opinion a lot more work is needed here. The Imagination and imagery is fine but in such abundance as to wear the r
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