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I registered ofr the class on Sept 20 & 25, subsequently I cancelled the Sept 20 and attended the course on Sept 25
I registered for the classes held on both Sept. 20 and Sept. 25. Subsequently, I cancelled my registration for the one on Sept. 20 and attended only the one on Sept. 25