English assignment - finally correction

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Hello EnglishForums!I have been assigned to write a summary and a discussion/commentary on an article. I have read this through 3-4 times now, and would very much like anyone with english or american language to correct it - this would help me a lot!The text is about 800 words splitted in summary (300) and commentary+discussion (600). Any part corrected will be pleased!Thanks very much in advance Greetings from Denmark and meMichael Nielsen

Fandorin · Accepted Answer

Hi, Outblaster. Welcome to English Forums. Please, provide us with samples here, in the post, and we will try to correct or discuss any obstacles you have. It's unlikely anyone will download your papers. <img class='emoticon' style='Width:19px;Height:19px;' data-delaysrc='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/1.gif' src='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/1.gif' alt='Emotion: smile'/> Try to highlight your doubts here, not the articles at all. The latter would not get fast responses, I guess.

Outblaster · Answer

Okay, thanks for your fast answer :-) As I already told, I have read the text through a couple of times, and I cannot find anymore mistakes! But I know that if a person from England is just "skimming" his eyes down the page, he might locate one very fast. I can look at the exact same sentence and still not find any mistakes

Though, as you said, I have SOME doubts:

The article is about sharing of personal information and the difference of social life online and offline. (1st line)

The text is from 2006 and featuring the author herself and five others more or less.

Therefore, when reading an online profile, we should be skeptical and not believe 100% in what is written.(under commentary and discussion, 2. paragraph last sentence)

We take what is written as the truth (commentary and discussion, 3. paragraph)

now it has become a trend to track down people live (comm & dis. 5 paragraph)

Fandorin · Answer

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Okay, thanks for your fast answer :-) As I already told, I have read the text through a couple of times, and I cannot find anymore mistakes! But I know that if a person from England is just "skimming" his eyes down the page, he might locate one very fast. I can look at the exact same sentence and still not find any mistakes
Though, as you said, I have SOME doubts:

The article is about sharing of personal information and the difference of social life online and offline. (1st line)

The text is from 2006 and featuring the author herself and five others more or less. The coherence of sentence seems quite odd to me. I would say: The text dated 2006 and features the author herself and five another as well to some extent.

Therefore, when reading an online profile, we should be skeptical and not believe 100% in what is written.(under commentary and discussion, 2. paragraph last sentence)

We take what is written as the truth (commentary and discussion, 3. paragraph)

Now it has become a trend to track down people live (comm & dis. 5 paragraph). It's rather unclear to me. It seems we are after a nuclear war, looking for people who are alive.

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