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Global warming is mainly caused by humans and it’s becoming worst and worst that directly influence our lives.

The biggest cause of global warming is carbon dioxide emission from the burning of fossil fuel in power plants, many kinds of other factory and motor vehicles. That 90 % of the man-made smoke trap under the Ozon layer leading to the rise of temperature. Worryingly, the earth's temperature has no sign of decrement. And even though we know trees can help us control the situation, deforestation still places uncontrollableThe worst effect of global warming is the rise in sea levels which could make thousands of people living near the sea lose their houses or even die. No more forests, no more trees, not only the temperature rise but also leads to the widespread extinction of species because they lose their inhabitants. Humans are also the victims when experiencing heat-related illness and death, and the spread of infectious. Not only so, but humans also have to suffer from extreme weather patterns such as severe storms, heatwaves, floods, and droughts and they are predicted to be harsher in the future, such as Russia with no snowfall, but Egypt; some places have to suffer from catastrophic floods the whole year and some others have to endure the drought contribute to the water shortage that damages crops, result in famine becomes popular and widespread than ever.But we still have time to step by step, day by day together solve those humanity problems. People have to take some instant action for the future we still have the Earth is our home.

Teechr · Accepted Answer

Hello, and welcome to the forum.

trang1977 Global warming is mainly caused by humans and it’s becoming worst and worst that directly influence our lives.

Was that the essay question? If not, what was the exact essay question, and how many words are you expected to write? Are you practising for IELTS or TOEFL?

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trang1977, can you help me check my essay, please.

Your request is not the best. Consider these three sentences.

1) Please help me to carry my bags ( You carry the bags, but I assist you. )
 2) Please carry my bags. (I carry the bags for you. )
 3) Please help me by carrying my bags. (If I carry your bags, it will be good for you.)

1) Please help me to check  my essay. (You check your essay, but I assist. The web site does not allow this.)
2) Please check  my essay. ( I check your essay and give you feedback. )
3) Please help me by checking my essay. (I check  your essay and give you feedback.  That will help you.)

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Global warming is mainly caused by humans and it’s becoming worst and worst that directly influence our lives.

(See previous post.)
I have highlighted the errors. You need to pay special attention to plural versus singular noun forms. If there is more than one thing, you must add -s to the noun.

The biggest cause of global warming is carbon dioxide emission from the burning of fossil fuel in power plants, many kinds of other factory and motor vehicles. That 90 % of the man-made smoke trap under the Ozon layer leading to the rise of temperature. (That is not a sentence. There is no main verb. There are spacing, capitalization and spelling errors. ) Worryingly, the earth's temperature has no sign of decrement. (??) And even though we know trees can help us control the situation, deforestation still places uncontrollableThe (ungrammatical) worst effect of global warming is the rise in sea levels which could make thousands of people living near the sea lose their houses or even die. No more forests, no more trees, not only the temperature rise (This is not a good clause. It is ungrammatical. ) but also leads to the widespread extinction of species because they lose their inhabitants. (wrong word) Humans are also the victims, ~~when~~ experiencing heat-related illness and death, and the spread of infectious. (wrong usage. Infectious is an adjective. You need a noun.) Not only so, (wrong word) but humans also ~~have to~~ will suffer from extreme weather patterns such as severe storms, heatwaves, floods, and droughts which ~~and they~~ are predicted to be harsher in the future, such as Russia with no snowfall, but Egypt; some places have to suffer from catastrophic floods the whole year and some others have to endure the drought contribute to the water shortage that damages crops, result in famine becomes popular and widespread than ever.But (Badly formed sentence. You need two or three sentences here.) we still have time to step by step, day by day together solve those humanity (wrong word) problems. People have to take some ~~instant~~ action for the future we still have the Earth is our home. (ungrammatical sentence structure)

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