(Elena - 171004-10) Review Of Transcription?

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Dear Teachers,I transcribed the first part of ‘One Fine Day’, a radio program.I would appreciate it if you could review my transcription after listening to the audio in the link below:(elena - 171004)https://drive.google.com/open?id=0Byit46A8h6YwYkVzOWFmaDBLVzQ The word, “Chu-seok,” literally translates to “Autumn evening,” but the hidden meanings are “the  Autumn night with the most gorgeous moonlight” or “the great holiday celebrating the brightly shining moon.” It is Chu-seok here in Korea and the moon will be rising very very soon. There's a fork custom in Korea called “Dal-ma-ji.” It includes the tradition of looking at the full moon of Chus-eok and making a wish. When the full moon comes up tonight, what kind of wishes would you make? I'm Lena Park and this is One Fine Day. (elena - 171005)https://drive.google.com/open?id=0Byit46A8h6YwaDdIYlJfc0FoaFU I recently read about an American psychologist. After years and years of meticulous research, his really studied results claimed that by observing just an hour-long conversation between a husband and a wife, he could predict whether they will still be together in 15 years of time with 95% accuracy. It's quite fascinating and a little scary, isn't it? An hour-long conversation - it might seem like just a tiny portion of a whole, but it goes to show that this tiny portion holds enough to determine the fate of the whole. This probably applies to other relationships as well. Being tiresome less than loving, you know, out of comforter habit, being short-tempered, and impatient, just cuz you're tired. If you ever see yourself from a third person point of view, what would you think? I'm Lena Park and this is One Fine Day. (elena - 171006)https://drive.google.com/open?id=0Byit46A8h6YwVEhFSW1nbzlzdEk Mothers are amazing for so many reasons. One of those reasons includes how they understand baby’s babbles. It just sounds like a bunch of random *** syllables to strangers, but mothers: “Oh, you're hungry. Sure honey, here's your toy. They just know. I guess it's because moms focus their undivided attention to their base. All day long they keep their eyes on their baby, constantly checking to see if anything is causing even the most minute discomfort, and when you focus on the details, you're able to see things you never saw before, hear things you never could hear before. That's probably how moms can tell exactly what their babies want, and how they're feeling. Maybe we should try to give some attention too, and focus on the details of our loved ones, who may have been intentionally being taken for granted by us. We're just so busy living. I'm Lena Park and this is One Fine Day. (elena - 171010)https://drive.google.com/open?id=0Byit46A8h6YwV193Y2NrckdDbE0 We do our best most of the time, but every so often even the best of us just feels lazy, and when this sudden doubt of laziness attacks, everything feels like a chore. Whether it be work, working out, or even relationships, we can get tired, lose all at motivation, everything just feels like an uphill climb, but that's when we have to rally and remind ourselves of how precious and important these things are. Work, health, relationships, every little bit of effort is well worth it. I'm Lena Park and this is One Fine Day. I hope to get your kind feedback regarding any punctuation, typos or anything else.Thanks and best regards,David Kim

GPY · Accepted Answer

I've done the first one. Nearly all of it is fine.

The word “Chu-seok” literally translates to “autumn evening,” but the hidden meanings are “the autumn night with the most gorgeous moonlight” or “the great holiday celebrating the brightly shining moon.” It is Chu-seok here in Korea, and the moon will be rising very very soon. There's a folk custom in Korea called “Dal-ma-ji.” It includes the tradition of looking up at the full moon of Chu-seok and making a wish. When the full moon comes up tonight, what kind of wishes would you make? I'm Lena Park, and this is One Fine Day.

The two commas that I added are not mandatory. As far as I see in search results, hyphenation and capitalisation of "Chu-seok" and "Dal-ma-ji" vary. I do not know whether there is a definitive opinion on this. Capitalisation of the name of a festival is reasonable.

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And the second one:

I recently read about an American psychologist. After years and years of meticulous research, he released study results claiming that, by observing just an hour-long conversation between a husband and wife, he could predict whether they will still be together in 15 years' time with 95% accuracy. It's quite fascinating and a little scary, isn't it? An hour-long conversation — it might seem like just a tiny portion of the whole, but it goes to show that this tiny portion holds enough to determine the fate of the whole. This probably applies to other relationships as well. Being terse and less than loving, you know, out of comfort or habit, being short-tempered, and impatient, just because you're tired. If you ever see yourself from a third person's point of view, what would you think? I'm Lena Park, and this is One Fine Day.

It is always a problem to know how to write the abbreviation of "because", which is very common in everyday speech. "cuz" looks horrible to my eye – low-grade and childish – and " 'cause" seems a bit pedantic. When transcribing casual dialogue, where there is a need or desire to portray the casual nature of the speech, I would probably use "cos". My feeling here is that it is best to write "because" in full, even though that's not literally what she says. In this transcription, "cos" and (especially) "cuz" stand out like the proverbial sore thumb, in a way that does not occur in speech. Opinions on these points may vary.

She seems to fluff the line "what would you think?", but I suppose that is what she intended to say.

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Mothers are amazing for so many reasons. One of those reasons include how they understand babies' babbles. It just sounds like a bunch of random half-syllables to strangers, but mothers: “Oh, you're hungry. Sure honey, here's your toy.” They just know. I guess it's because moms focus their undivided attention to their babies. All day long they keep their eyes on their baby, constantly checking to see if anything is causing even the most minute discomfort, and when you focus on the details, you're able to see things you never saw before, hear things you never could hear before. That's probably how moms can tell exactly what their babies want, and how they're feeling. Maybe we should try to give some attention too, and focus on the details of our loved ones, who may have been unintentionally being taken for granted by us. We're just so busy living. I'm Lena Park, and this is One Fine Day.

She says "include", though it is not grammatical. She fluffs the word "unintentionally", but I believe that is what she intended to say.

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The last one. As with the others, your hearing of it is almost all correct:

We do our best most of the time, but every so often even the best of us just feels lazy, and when this sudden bout of laziness attacks, everything feels like a chore. Whether it be work, working out, or even relationships, we can get tired, lose all [?] motivation. Everything just feels like an uphill climb, but that's when we have to rally and remind ourselves of how precious and important these things are. Work, health, relationships — every little bit of effort is well worth it. I'm Lena Park, and this is One Fine Day.

It does sound as if she says "lose all at motivation", but that makes no sense. I think she fluffs her words. Perhaps she meant to say "lose all our motivation", or just "lose all motivation". She is clearly near enough a native-level English speaker, but I think occasionally she makes a slip. Of course, native speakers make slips when speaking too. On the whole she has a nice speaking voice.

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