0
Anonymous Posted 14 years ago
Letter Writing
EDIT MY LETTER PLEASE
Dear Ms.Atwal,
My names Sajan Patel I was born in Canada and now I’m currently 15 years old. I have short black hair, brown eyes and I have glasses but I don’t like wearing them so I usually wear contacts. I used to go to karate, judo, and aikido but recently quit 2 years ago which was one of my passions which got boring. I have no brothers or sisters making me the only child which is good because I don’t have to share my stuff. My favourite subject is art because I have a talent for it and I would like to become an artist as my career.
One thing I dislike learning about science would be the formulas, because they get mixed up in my head. Firstly in science I would like to learn more about robotics how they are engineered, programmed, and etc. Secondly I would like to learn more about the Milky Way and space in general.
My goal for grade 10 science would be to achieve a mark of 80% or above. To achieve this goal I will need to attend class every day and not miss any important information. When it comes to assignments I’ll need to try my hardest and hand them in on time. When I am notified that there is going to be a quiz or test I will study an hour a day or even more but most importantly split the studying up into days instead of studying on the last day. I will follow all the rules by listening in class not interrupting the teacher or a student when they are talking, and cooperating with others.
From Sajan Patel
My names Sajan Patel I was born in Canada and now I’m currently 15 years old. I have short black hair, brown eyes and I have glasses but I don’t like wearing them so I usually wear contacts. I used to go to karate, judo, and aikido but recently quit 2 years ago which was one of my passions which got boring. I have no brothers or sisters making me the only child which is good because I don’t have to share my stuff. My favourite subject is art because I have a talent for it and I would like to become an artist as my career.
One thing I dislike learning about science would be the formulas, because they get mixed up in my head. Firstly in science I would like to learn more about robotics how they are engineered, programmed, and etc. Secondly I would like to learn more about the Milky Way and space in general.
My goal for grade 10 science would be to achieve a mark of 80% or above. To achieve this goal I will need to attend class every day and not miss any important information. When it comes to assignments I’ll need to try my hardest and hand them in on time. When I am notified that there is going to be a quiz or test I will study an hour a day or even more but most importantly split the studying up into days instead of studying on the last day. I will follow all the rules by listening in class not interrupting the teacher or a student when they are talking, and cooperating with others.
From Sajan Patel
Top answer
I am not sure what the goal of this letter is, but here are my suggestions for making it clearer and correct. My changes are in bold (and deleted words are crossed out). I have also added spaces between paragraphs to make the letter more readable.
- I am not sure what the goal of this letter is, but here are my suggestions for making it clearer and correct.
- My changes are in bold (and deleted words are crossed out).
- I have also added spaces between paragraphs to make the letter more readable.
- Atwal : My name is Sajan Patel .
- I was born in Canada and now I’m currently 15 years old.
Get the Weekly English Kit 📬
New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.
1 Answers
0
I am not sure what the goal of this letter is, but here are my suggestions for making it clearer and correct. My changes are in bold (and deleted words are crossed out). I have also added spaces between paragraphs to make the letter more readable.
Dear Ms.Atwal:
My name is Sajan Patel. I was born in Canada andnow I’m currently
Dear Ms.Atwal:
My name is Sajan Patel. I was born in Canada and
0
Related Questions