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01b00Topic: In 010200, parents arrange marriage for their children, in your opinion what are the advantages and disadvantages of the arranged marriage.02b02br
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00Choosing husband or wife is one of the most important decisions of everyone’s life because marriage can bring a happy life and unhappy life. In many countries in the word especially in Western countries a man or woman can choose their own partner; however, in some countries in Asia like 010200 parents arrange their children’s marriage. Such decision can have both advantages and disadvantages00.01b02b02br
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01b00One of the most important advantages to arranged marriage is having a good financial security and living condition.02b00 Of course, Money doesn’t automatically bring a good happiness, but the lack of money can cause lots of troubles in the family and stresses in any relationship. In Cambodian tradition, parents often involve transfers of property to their marrying children, and hopefully they wish to bring their children with a very good financial and living condition. For example, some Cambodian parents give property such as house, land, money and jewelry to the new couple after getting married, and they have an important role in solving any problems happening to their married children. In addition, parents have more life experiences than their children; therefore, they can usually make a better decision or judgment. For instance, In Cambodian culture, many parents always think carefully about whom their children should marry, and most of their thoughts focus on financial situation because they strongly believe that if their children get married to a rich husband or wife, financial problem will not happen.02br
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00 01b00The second advantage of the arranged marriage is that children can bring gratefulness and honor to their family.02b00 Cambodian people believe in Buddhist. In Buddhism, People believe in returning gratitude to their parents, and children have an obligation to maintain their family’s honor. Marrying into a good family is considered to be a way of returning gratitude to parents, especially for a young girl. Moreover, getting married to someone that is arranged by parents is recognized that children obey Khmer traditional culture and respect their parents gratefully. For example, when a daughter get married to man that is selected by her parents, she will be considered a grateful daughter because everything she behaves doesn’t go against Khmer tradition.02br
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00 00The 01b00third advantage is that parents can end a very big and important duty in their life.02b00 Traditionally, it is an obligation for Cambodian parents to choose and arrange marriage for their children so that their family’s reputation and honor can be retained. Generally, Cambodian children live with their parents until they get married, and parents have a lot of responsibilities for their children. Choosing marriage partner for their children is one of the most important responsibilities during their life. For instance, from the time their children were born until the time they get married parents have to do a lot of duties such as taking care of their children’s health, earning money to support the basic needs and education for their children and either looking for children’s marriage partner. After getting married, children have their own responsibility and they have to follow the ways their parents behave toward them. Therefore, parents do not need to responsible for such heavy burdens anymore. 02br
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00 00Although arranged marriage has advantages, it still has some advantages. On obvious disadvantage is domestic violence. Exactly, arranged marriage is usually arranged by parents or someone else. However, it is an individual’s marriage, but even an opinion about this marriage is not asked individually, so a daughter or son gets marry to one they even don’t know. After marriage, sometimes they can understand that their wife or husband doesn’t have the characteristic which they are looking for so the problems begin to happen.00 02br
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0 Not a very balanced essay. You were asked to discuss advantages and disadvantages. The entire essay discusses advantages with just one sentence: '01b 00One02b 00 obvious disadvantage is domestic violence' on the disadvantages.

  • 0 Not a very balanced essay.
  • You were asked to discuss advantages and disadvantages.
  • The entire essay discusses advantages with just one sentence: '01b 00One02b 00 obvious disadvantage is domestic violence' on the disadvantages.
  • You should try to discuss both sides equally.
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0 Not a very balanced essay. You were asked to discuss advantages and disadvantages. The entire essay discusses advantages with just one sentence: '01b00One02b00 obvious disadvantage is domestic violence' on the disadvantages. You should try to discuss both sides equally. 0-
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Emotion: indifferent yea ur essay needs to talk about the disadvantages of parents arranging te marriage

like right now i have to
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Hi,

What exactly is the topic of your essay?
eg Did your teacher just say 'Write as much as you can about this movie?'

Unless we know the topic, it is hard to comment on the essay.

Clive

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