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Anonymous Posted 18 years ago
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0 Hi, 02 br
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00 Please correct this e-mail. 02 br
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00 Hi Susie, 02 br
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00 I have talked with (to??) the boss and he said that I could ask you to transfer the total sum (amount??) of money (optional phrase??) for two desks and two plants for our offices. Please transter the money to my bank account as soon as possible. My bank number is XXX-XXXXXXXX. 02 br
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00 Will be waiting for it. 02 br
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00 Best wishes, (this words seem good but trite. Any others??) 02 br
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00 XXX 0-
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00 Please correct this e-mail. 02 br
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00 Hi Susie, 02 br
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00 I have talked with (to??) the boss and he said that I could ask you to transfer the total sum (amount??) of money (optional phrase??) for two desks and two plants for our offices. Please transter the money to my bank account as soon as possible. My bank number is XXX-XXXXXXXX. 02 br
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00 Will be waiting for it. 02 br
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00 Best wishes, (this words seem good but trite. Any others??) 02 br
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00 XXX 0-
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) 12 u 11 b 10 payable 12 b 10 for two desks and two plants for our offices. Please transter the money to my bank account as soon as possible. 12 br 12 br 11 del 10 Will be waiting for it.
- ) 12 u 11 b 10 payable 12 b 10 for two desks and two plants for our offices.
- Please transter the money to my bank account as soon as possible.
- 12 br 12 br 11 del 10 Will be waiting for it.
- 12 del 12 br 12 br 10 Best wishes, (this words seem good but trite.
- ) 12 br 12 br 10 *** 12 br 12 br 12 blockquote 10 How will she know how much money to transfer?
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01 cite 10 Anonymous 12 cite 10 Hi, 12 br
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10 Please correct this e-mail. 12 br
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10 Hi Susie, 12 br
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10 I have talked 11 u 10 with (to??) the boss 12 u 10 11 b 10 with xxxxxx [use his name] 12 b 10 and he said that I could ask you to 11 u 10
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0 Thank you very much, Feebs11. 02 br
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00 I saw some of your corrections and felt that you don't like business correspondences (or perhaps other kinds of letters -- although I have not seen other kinds) in formal or informal situations to have any kinds of those 'feeling' words or phrases and you seem to favor a 'straight' approach where you would just write the correspondenc
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00 I saw some of your corrections and felt that you don't like business correspondences (or perhaps other kinds of letters -- although I have not seen other kinds) in formal or informal situations to have any kinds of those 'feeling' words or phrases and you seem to favor a 'straight' approach where you would just write the correspondenc
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0 In business situations, personal feelings are irrelevant. Clarity and precision are far more important. Your e-mail is relating to money. It is therefore particularly important that it is clear, and you haven't answered the question about how your contact is to know what moneys are involved. Things may be done differently with your company, but I also would question putting money into a persona
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