drunk woman

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0You're not going to believe this. Last night, someone knocked on my door so I walked to the door and opened it. The moment the door was unlocked, a woman pushed the door open and jumped on me. I fell and was pretty dizzy from the blow to my head as she expressed her love for me. I could hardly understand what she said. When I recovered my strength (is this OK. I want to say something like my head was spinning and I didn't have energy to push her away, but when I recovered from that, Iw as able to do that,what is the right transition, another transition I can think of is regain conciousness but that would mean I passed out), I pushed her to the side and got up. At that moment, I realized a drunk stranger(what is the right adjective for a woman you don't know) woman was in my room. I asked her for her name. She kept saying how much so loved me as she lied on the floor, nearly passed out. Soon a guy walked into my room and picked her up. She hugged him tight and they appeared to be a couple and left.02br02br001. Are there any mistakes?02br002. Please answer the questions.02br00Thanks.0-

Doll · Accepted Answer

0Just my two cents, 02br
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00I would change this sentence: 01font00She kept saying how much so loved me as she lied on the floor. 02font02br
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00As for your other questions,1- as I recovered, as I gained my strength again, as I recovered my strenght are all okay for me. 02br
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002- A stranger woman is okay. A woman would be okay too because the context helps us understand the real fact that the boy doesn't know her.0-

Old Man Gordon · Answer

0...a she 01u00lay02u00 on the floor. (Although she was not telling the truth, lying, the sense here is that she was horizontal)0-

Optilang · Answer

0 You're not going to believe this. Last night, someone knocked on my door so I walked to the door and opened it. (01font01i00Last night there was a knock at the door, so I walked over and opened it02i02font00 - 01font00For me, the word door is used too many times in this opening part.02font00)The moment the door was unlocked, a woman pushed 01font00(it)02font00 01del~~00the door02del~~00 open and jumped on me. I fell and was pretty dizzy from the blow to my head as she expressed her love for me. I could hardly understand what she said. When I recovered my strength (is this OK. I want to say something like my head was spinning and I didn't have energy to push her away, but when I recovered from that, Iw as able to do that,what is the right transition, another transition I can think of is regain conciousness but that would mean I passed out), I pushed her to the side01font00 (alternative suggestions: 01i00I pushed her aside/I pushed her to one side02i00)02font00 and got up. At that moment, I realized a drunk stranger(what is the right adjective for a woman you don't know) woman was in my room. I asked her for her name. She kept saying how much 01font00she 02font01del~~01font02font00so02del~~00 loved me as she 01font00lay, nearly passed out,02font01del~~00lied02del~~00 on the floor, 01del~~00nearly passed out02del~~00. Soon a guy walked into my room and picked her up. She hugged him tight and they 01del~~00appeared to be a couple and02del~~00 left. (Now I would add another sentence - 01font00It looked like they were a couple.02font02br
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01i00When I recovered my strength02i00 - This is ok 01i00(is this OK. I want to say something like my head was spinning and I didn't have energy to push her away, but when I recovered from that, Iw as able to do that,what is the right transition, another transition I can think of is regain conciousness but that would mean I passed out)02i02br
00An alternative - When I recovered from (the effects of) the blow,................02br
01i00At that moment, I realized a drunk stranger(what is the right adjective for a woman you don't know) woman was in my room.02i00 She is a stranger to you - I'm not sure about the term 01i00stranger woman.02i00 I would use something00 01font00like00 a drunk woman on 00its own. It is clear from yout text that you do not know her as you go on to 01i00ask her name02i02font02br
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New2grammar · Answer

0 Thank you, Doll, Gordon and Optilang.02br
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00Optilang, what do you think of "someone knocked on my door "? I would like to know how you interpret it. 0-

Optilang · Answer

1i00Optilang, what do you think of "someone knocked on my door "? I would like to know how you interpret it.02i02br
00There is nothing wrong with your phrase. - I interpret it that someone knocked on your door.0-

New2grammar · Answer

0 I thought it wasn't natural because you changed it. Thanks, Optilang. 0-

Optilang · Answer

0 Sorry - I certainly didn't intend to cause confusion.0-

New2grammar · Answer

0 - 01font00It looked like they were a couple02br
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00Sorry, Optilang. I have another question after re-reading your suggestions. Why is "They appeared to be a couple" replaced with the above version? Is appeared to be not natural or wrong?02br
00Thanks00 02font00 0-

Kooyeen · Answer

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01cite10optilang12cite10At that moment, I realized a drunk woman...12blockquote

10Hi,02br
00I was wondering about that 01i00"drunk"02i00 used as an adjective. Should it be a 01i00"drunken02i00" woman? My dictionary says01i00 "drunk"02i00 is not used before a noun, is that true? Thanks. 0-

Optilang · Answer

1i00 - 01font00It looked like they were a couple02br
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01span00Sorry, Optilang. I have another question after re-reading your suggestions. Why is "They appeared to be a couple" replaced with the above version? Is appeared to be not natural or wrong?02span02font02i02br
01i00She hugged him tight and they appeared to be a couple and left.02i02br
00This just doesn't sound right to me when I read it. 01i00She hugged him tight02i00 - ok 01i00they appeared to be a couple02i00 - ok 01i00and they left 02i00 - ok02br
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00but when joined by 01i01b00and02b00 02i00it doesn't work for me. It just seems a strange sentence to my ear.02br
00It may not be wrong, but I think it could be expressed in a better way. 0-

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