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Brank87 Posted 15 years ago
Letter Writing

Drafting recommendations? Job application letter!

Hi people! I'm pretty new on the forum but so far I think it's awesome!

Maybe some of you can take a look to this job application letter I'm writing for a job in Germany.

Since English is not my mother tong I'm pretty sure I have many mistakes. I hope you can help me!

Thanks in advanced!!

Name
Address
City, State, Zip Code
Phone Number
Email

Skype username

Mai, 2011

Dear Contact Person:

I am pleased to contact you with the aim of presenting myself and offer my services as a diploma holder in International Business Administration (Europa-Universität Viadrina, Frankfurt /Oder, Germany) and as a BA in Business Administration (Universidad Católica de Córdoba, Argentina).

I am writing to apply for the mmmmm position advertised in the mmmmm. As requested, I am attaching my resume.

After several years of training I consider I have enough knowledge and specially the desire of meeting the challenges of the dynamic and complex world in which we live. I believe I have managed to acquire the ability to work in teams and I have a flexible personality and adaptable to changes. My intercultural vision, as a result of travels and one year out of my motherland, in some way, endorse these statements.

I reached an advanced level of English and I speak German in a basic level but I am on my way to improve it. Right now I’m attending to classes in the Goethe Institute.

From an early age I had a strong interest in computer science so I am always at the forefront in regard to information systems and multimedia edition.

The above makes me consider qualified for this position because… (customize depending on the position)

I am currently in charge of the administrative area of the SME "Distribuidora Arroyito”, a food distributor located in the city of Cordoba. I am responsible for the analysis of the economic and financial situation. I'm in charge of the pricing process and the payment of wages as well. And, since the company had a spontaneous growth in the last years, process reengineering and standardization are things that are required from me.

Right now I am seeking for a job that presents a challenge to bring everything I have learned and in the meanwhile, continuing to improve in the academic and professional sense.

I consider myself in possession of a great capacity for learning and for carrying out the tasks that I intended to comply.

I am available for an interview where I can answer any questions and go deep on my profiles information. Since I am currently in Argentina, I suggest doing this by video-conferencing or telephone.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to speaking with you about this employment opportunity.

Sincerely,

Nicolás Caramella (24 years old)
  

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Welcome to the Forums! I offer a few comments and suggestions on your cover letter. I did not make a lot of detailed edits because you might want to rewrite certain parts.

  • Welcome to the Forums!
  • I offer a few comments and suggestions on your cover letter.
  • I did not make a lot of detailed edits because you might want to rewrite certain parts.
  • ------------------ Ma y , 2011 Dear Contact Person: I am pleased to contact you with the aim of presenting (introducing is better) myself and offer ing my services as a diploma holder in International Business Administration (Europa-Universität Viadrina, Frankfurt /Oder, Germany) and as a BA in Business Administration (Universidad Católica de Córdoba, Argentina).
  • Comments: a) "offering services" is offering a contractural relationship, not to be hired as an employee.
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Welcome to the Forums!

I offer a few comments and suggestions on your cover letter. I did not make a lot of detailed edits because you might want to rewrite certain parts.

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May, 2011

Dear Contact Person:
I am pleased to contact you with the aim of presenting (introducing is bet
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I'm so thanksfull for your help!! I've checked what you said and I've changed some parts...

Do you think it's too long? Would you just delete some parts?

Thanks again for your advices!

Mai, 2011

Dear Contact Person:

I am pleased to contact you with the aim of introducing myself as a graduate in International Busin
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I don't know your situation, but infer from your letter that you are working in a small, but fast-growing company, and are seeking a broadening international experience.

The points I would make in such a cover letter would be something along these lines:

Because my company is small, I have had a wide range of opportunities to put my formal education into practice. I have done adm

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