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Hung Sai Cheong Posted 12 years ago
Grammar

Dose it sound natural?

"You convinced me not to romanticize sadness but I can't help and look you in the eyes that are looking in the sky. "

It's just a sentence the came up in my mind few days ago and I want to make sure it's grammatically correct.
  

Top answer

In terms of syntax, there is nothing incorrect. But it is not very sensible, and maybe it's not what you intend.

— AlpheccaStars

  • In terms of syntax, there is nothing incorrect.
  • But it is not very sensible, and maybe it's not what you intend.
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In terms of syntax, there is nothing incorrect.
But it is not very sensible, and maybe it's not what you intend.
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"You convinced me not to romanticize sadness but I can't help and look you in the eyes that are looking in the sky. "

The part before 'but' is fine.

The part after 'but' is unclear in meaning, awkward and unstructured.
eg What is it that you can't help? The romanticizing
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I was trying to describe a picture in my mind that I was looking in a girl's eyes and she was looking in the sky. Could you get it when you first read it?
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Hung Sai Cheong I was trying to describe a picture in my mind that I was looking in a girl's eyes and she was looking in the sky. Could you get it when you first read it?
Not really.

"You convinced me not to romanticize sadness but I can't help but look you in the eyes as you are looking at the sky. "
"You convinced me not to
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@Alphecca The first one is better. It's cleaner. Thanks for your help.
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