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Could you please help me phrase these sentences properly?

1 I'm not good enough at this game not to die in/on this level. (game)
2 Of all the place he could have been, he had to be here. What a coicidence?
3 If we had gone to her, We would have been sure that she would have done a nice job.
4 If there is too much noise, we won't be able to hear the noise of it.
5 Now that we have a baby, I'm no longer my wife priority. That really doesn't make a husband want a baby.

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Doctor D · Accepted Answer

Here are my suggestions.

1 I'm not good enough at this game not to die in/on this level. (game)
I would use "on." Also, it would be less confusing to say: "I'm not good enough at this game to stay alive on this level."

2 Of all the place he could have been, he had to be here. What a coicidence?
Of all the places he could have been, he had to be here. What a coincidence! (If you want to raise a question, say: "Was that a coincidence?")

3 If we had gone to her, We would have been sure that she would have done a nice job.
If we had gone to her, we are sure that she would have done a nice job. (You are certain in the present, not the past.)

4 If there is too much noise, we won't be able to hear the noise of it.
"The noise of it" is unclear. What noise exactly? Identify it. "If there is too much noise, we won't be able to hear George screaming."

5 Now that we have a baby, I'm no longer my wife priority. That really doesn't make a husband want a baby.
Now that we have a baby, I'm no longer my wife's priority. (However, the next sentence is questionable. You discovered your loss of priority after the baby was born. But the second sentence looks forward from a time before there is a baby born. Do you see the problem? Perhaps you want to say something like: "If I had known that earlier, I wouldn't have wanted a baby so eagerly.")

Hope this helps.

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