DON’T LEAVE ME ALONE !!!!!

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DON’T LEAVE ME ALONE !!!!!I search for your tender heart !!!!!!!!!! But I don't recognize even your cartMay be you changeor you are engagedIs she you're brideto take her aside?!Believe it or notyou don't deserve my love I see the world greyplease don't prayI'll be with the moonforgetting the loon2002\2003Respectfully,written by :Sadeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeem@------\-------------( wish you like it )

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

Well, it rhymes (except change & engaged, and not & love), Sadeem, but other than that I cannot make much sense of it. You shouldn't need to use exclamation points in a poem, though-- the word choice is sufficient in a good piece of poetry. Now, some questions:

What cart?
Why not pray?
How 'with the moon'?
What loon? (loon: large somewhat primitive fish-eating diving bird of the northern hemisphere having webbed feet placed far back; related to the grebes)

I think the title should be, rather: Leave Me Alone.

Sadeem · Answer

Mister MicawberWell, it rhymes (except change & engaged, and not & love), Sadeem, but other than that I cannot make much sense of it. You shouldn't need to use exclamation points in a poem, though-- the word choice is sufficient in a good piece of poetry. Now, some questions:
What cart?
Why not pray?
How 'with the moon'?
What loon? (loon: large somewhat primitive fish-eating diving bird of the northern hemisphere having webbed feet placed far back; related to the grebes)
I think the title should be, rather: Leave Me Alone.

hi

first of all thanks for passing by

and glad having your opinions on my humble words:)

you know it was the first attempt or me to write poem

i like your questions .. it comes by the rhymes

but the looon i think it means idiot

anyway; i'll do my best to write ANOTHER POEM BUT CONSIDERING YOUR POINTS

HONOR SIR

Dongdong · Answer

hi~ Sadeem,

your poem was written beautifully.

but its title is contradictory to its content,as Mister Micawber said in his post,isn't it?

for your title is Don't leave me alone, that means you need it, yet the last phrase of your poem says, "I'll be with the moon
forgetting the loon"

so what's your really want? to forget, or not to forget?lol`~~maybe that's a problem waiting for your solution ahead.

and could you tell me what your "cart" means?

and why do you want to be with a cold "moon" not an passionate "loon"?

but without passionate sun shining in the heaven, how can the moon get its own glow?

so, please forgive my offence, could your last verses be changed into this, that is,

"I'll be with the lovable loon,

forgetting the horrible moon.

for without love and my beloved one

how can i suffer from the eternal pain?"

just my humble opinion.

, if you don't like it , you can throw it into the dustbin of forgetting.

ps. hi! Lovely Sadeem, could i put this moon picture as an illustration for your poem?

is the girl with wings in the picture like you? i believe it must be.

for she thirsts for being with the moon, than with the loon. for that moon is more pure than anything on earth, isn't it? lol~~~

Sadeem · Answer

oh *** !!

you know Dongdong,, this contardiction always stays in girls' hearts !! we want to forget him but still we love him

i do enjoy reading your reply !!

but unfortunately ; i don't feel like writing more

I feel blue

!!

break a leg

Dongdong · Answer

Sadeemoh *** !!

you know Dongdong,, this contardiction always stays in girls' hearts !! we want to forget him but still we love him

i do enjoy reading your reply !! but unfortunately ; i don't feel like writing more

I feel blue !!

break a leg

hi~ Sadeem,
i'm so sorry for hearing you are not in a good mood.
but if you feel blue in your heart, please try this poem, hope it'd bring you some rainbows

into your blue days, breaking up each sadness in every corner of you mind.
everyone has ups and downs in their lifetime. but no matter what had happened to you, please

believe that i'd be a forever friend of yours, if i deserve your friendship.

though we'd never met for real, but through the poems you posted, i'd feel a very pious

heart is within your tender yet sensitive heart.
yet that only means there are somethings very pure still in your heart, and this purity is

not that easily found in this too-fast-changing world.
some people think that to put faith in *** is the most stupid thing in the world, they

rather like to put trust in what they can see, hear, or touch, but we all know that's

totally not ***, but idolatry, and the only result of it is the destruction of our spiritul

life.and without the holy spirit abiding within our heart how we can survive from the plot

of the Devil.and without soul in our heart how can we say we are still alive, yes, that's

not alive but absolutely dead!
yes! i still believe that without *** all mankind would not lead a happy life.
though they laugh, enjoy, but what they laugh, what they enjoy is not genuine, but false.
but when we put all our belief in ***, we could live in peace for ever, and live for ever,

for *** is the source of life, and life is the light of world. without light darkness will

be the only color above the earth.

so please allow me put this Color Poem here for you, and light will represent itself in

these beautiful colors.
so here we go,

Poems concerning colors

What is Red?
Red is the sound of tulips blossoming in the spring.
Red is the color of the ketchup you squeeze when the ump says play ball.
Red is the towel that lies in the sand.
Red is the color of the leaves that fall all down in the fall.
Red is the center of a sunset, while the seagulls soar into the horizon.
Red is the color of the stripe that soars in the sky on the flag.
Red is the color of tomato sauce that oozes all over yummy noodles.
Red is the color of the kite that zooms all over the afternoon sky.
Red is the marker that gives the grade that leads to your fate.
Red is the color of valintines that are givin to those who you love.
Red is the teddy bears new red bow.
Red is the color of Santa's suit thatyou feel as you give him a hug.
Red is the color of an apples shiney new skin as you sink your teeth into it.
Red is the color of the BLOOD that flows gently threw your body.
Red is the Red Bell Pepper that is hard sweet and crisp.
Red is the color of the stoplight as people groan in their cars.
Red is the stop sign that is big red and bright.
Red is the ant that bites and stings.
Red is the rainbow that appears after the rain its always the first color you see.
When you are Red you are emotional and quite the dramatic sort.
Red is land, air, and sea.
Red is everywhere you look.

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---------------------
What is Black?
Black is dark like a lark
Black is the color of tires
Black is the color of a dog
Black is the color of night
Black is bed time
Black is evil
Black is bad luck
Black is a cat
Black is Halloween
Black is fear
Black is a scary story
Black is a creeping monster
Black is a shadow
Black is the ink of a pen
Black is closing your eyes
Black is a bow-tie
Black is a lie
Black is a graveyard
Black is an eclipse
Black is a cold winter night
when the winds make fight
Black is no light
That is Black

---------------------------------------------------------

Green

Green, the color of a ripe Granny Smith apple.
Green, the color of the grass that I roll and tumble on.
Green, the color of the new leaves on an oak tree.
Green, the color of a flower stem breaking the soil and trying to reach the welcoming sun.

Green, the color that welcomes spring.

Green, the color of the go light that lets the color go-go-go through the warm and colorful

spring.

-----------------------------------------------------------------------

Blue

Are you sad?
Or feeling low?
This might hit you with a blow.
For how many things can blue mean?
1,2,3,4
Or more?
The blues are jazzy
Blue is sad
Blue could be a color
Blue could be the feelings of your mother
Of course, none of these are bad.
But they could make you mad.
Blue is the ocean, sky and sea
They are as beautiful as can be.

------------------------------------------------------------------------

Orange
Orange is feeling in your stomach after an orange soda quenched your thirst.
Orange is the sun after a summer day.
Orange is the sound of a field filled with dandy-lions blowing in the wind.
Orange is the taste of a pizza that just came out of the oven.
Orange is the sound of a busy bumblebee.
Orange is the taste of cold glass of orange juice.
Orange is the feeling inside you when you accomplish something.
Orange is the sound of a tomato plant growing.
Orange is the color of a carrot that just popped out of the ground.
Orange is the smell of a Tiger-Lilly petal.
Orange is the feeling after a baby smiles.
Orange is the color of a brown beaver's incisor.
Orange is the smell of a late July day.
Orange is the feeling of a puppy's fur.
Orange is the color of peach marmalade on a side of toast.
Orange is the sound of a canoe paddling through shallow water.
And orange is a color that is safe and alive.

ps. if the sky above your head is still blue, please allow me to paint these colors upon it, and make it bright for you. :

Sadeem · Answer

Dongdong
Sadeemoh *** !!

you know Dongdong,, this contardiction always stays in girls' hearts !! we want to forget him but still we love him

i do enjoy reading your reply !! but unfortunately ; i don't feel like writing more

I feel blue !!

break a leg

hi~ Sadeem,
i'm so sorry for hearing you are not in a good mood.
but if you feel blue in your heart, please try this poem, hope it'd bring you some rainbows

into your blue days, breaking up each sadness in every corner of you mind.
everyone has ups and downs in their lifetime. but no matter what had happened to you, please

believe that i'd be a forever friend of yours, if i deserve your friendship.
though we'd never met for real, but through the poems you posted, i'd feel a very pious

heart is within your tender yet sensitive heart.
yet that only means there are somethings very pure still in your heart, and this purity is

not that easily found in this too-fast-changing world.
some people think that to put faith in *** is the most stupid thing in the world, they

rather like to put trust in what they can see, hear, or touch, but we all know that's

totally not ***, but idolatry, and the only result of it is the destruction of our spiritul

life.and without the holy spirit abiding within our heart how we can survive from the plot

of the Devil.and without soul in our heart how can we say we are still alive, yes, that's

not alive but absolutely dead!
yes! i still believe that without *** all mankind would not lead a happy life.
though they laugh, enjoy, but what they laugh, what they enjoy is not genuine, but false.
but when we put all our belief in ***, we could live in peace for ever, and live for ever,

for *** is the source of life, and life is the light of world. without light darkness will

be the only color above the earth.

so please allow me put this Color Poem here for you, and light will represent itself in

these beautiful colors.
so here we go,

Poems concerning colors

What is Red?
Red is the sound of tulips blossoming in the spring.
Red is the color of the ketchup you squeeze when the ump says play ball.
Red is the towel that lies in the sand.
Red is the color of the leaves that fall all down in the fall.
Red is the center of a sunset, while the seagulls soar into the horizon.
Red is the color of the stripe that soars in the sky on the flag.
Red is the color of tomato sauce that oozes all over yummy noodles.
Red is the color of the kite that zooms all over the afternoon sky.
Red is the marker that gives the grade that leads to your fate.
Red is the color of valintines that are givin to those who you love.
Red is the teddy bears new red bow.
Red is the color of Santa's suit thatyou feel as you give him a hug.
Red is the color of an apples shiney new skin as you sink your teeth into it.
Red is the color of the BLOOD that flows gently threw your body.
Red is the Red Bell Pepper that is hard sweet and crisp.
Red is the color of the stoplight as people groan in their cars.
Red is the stop sign that is big red and bright.
Red is the ant that bites and stings.
Red is the rainbow that appears after the rain its always the first color you see.
When you are Red you are emotional and quite the dramatic sort.
Red is land, air, and sea.
Red is everywhere you look.

--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

---------------------
What is Black?
Black is dark like a lark
Black is the color of tires
Black is the color of a dog
Black is the color of night
Black is bed time
Black is evil
Black is bad luck
Black is a cat
Black is Halloween
Black is fear
Black is a scary story
Black is a creeping monster
Black is a shadow
Black is the ink of a pen
Black is closing your eyes
Black is a bow-tie
Black is a lie
Black is a graveyard
Black is an eclipse
Black is a cold winter night
when the winds make fight
Black is no light
That is Black

---------------------------------------------------------

Green

Green, the color of a ripe Granny Smith apple.
Green, the color of the grass that I roll and tumble on.
Green, the color of the new leaves on an oak tree.
Green, the color of a flower stem breaking the soil and trying to reach the welcoming sun.

Green, the color that welcomes spring.

Green, the color of the go light that lets the color go-go-go through the warm and colorful

spring.

-----------------------------------------------------------------------

Blue

Are you sad?
Or feeling low?
This might hit you with a blow.
For how many things can blue mean?
1,2,3,4
Or more?
The blues are jazzy
Blue is sad
Blue could be a color
Blue could be the feelings of your mother
Of course, none of these are bad.
But they could make you mad.
Blue is the ocean, sky and sea
They are as beautiful as can be.

------------------------------------------------------------------------

Orange
Orange is feeling in your stomach after an orange soda quenched your thirst.
Orange is the sun after a summer day.
Orange is the sound of a field filled with dandy-lions blowing in the wind.
Orange is the taste of a pizza that just came out of the oven.
Orange is the sound of a busy bumblebee.
Orange is the taste of cold glass of orange juice.
Orange is the feeling inside you when you accomplish something.
Orange is the sound of a tomato plant growing.
Orange is the color of a carrot that just popped out of the ground.
Orange is the smell of a Tiger-Lilly petal.
Orange is the feeling after a baby smiles.
Orange is the color of a brown beaver's incisor.
Orange is the smell of a late July day.
Orange is the feeling of a puppy's fur.
Orange is the color of peach marmalade on a side of toast.
Orange is the sound of a canoe paddling through shallow water.
And orange is a color that is safe and alive.

ps. if the sky above your head is still blue, please allow me to paint these colors upon it, and make it bright for you. :

wonderful reply

thanks

Dongdong · Answer

Cloths of Heaven

---by W.B.Yeats

Had I the heavens’ embroidered cloths,
Enwrought with golden and silver light,
The blue and the dim and the dark cloths
Of night and light and the half light,
I would spread the cloths under your feet:
But I, being poor, have only my dreams;
I have spread my dreams under your feet;
Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.

p.s. though it's not a poem composed by myself, yet the feeling that this poem conveyed is the same with me, so i put it here for you.

is the girl in the pic like you?

would you like to allow me to spread the colorful cloths in your summer dream?

maybe it'd transformed into a roaming cloud, carring your tender body within his gentle and warm arms here and there beneath the immense heaven, above the great sea~~~~ just like a cradle swaying the baby wherein rhythmedly and sweetly until the baby entering into another sweet dream~~~

DON’T LEAVE ME ALONE !!!!!

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