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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
Grammar
Does this sound ok?
I am frozen like when I sliced my finger while trying to open a can of peaches. Like when I watched a scary movie at Lorianne's house. Like when I fell off my bike.
I want to convey a series of flashbacks where the narrator is 'frozen' in. How do I achieve this while keeping the flow of 'like'? Would this flow make sense grammatically?
I want to convey a series of flashbacks where the narrator is 'frozen' in. How do I achieve this while keeping the flow of 'like'? Would this flow make sense grammatically?
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If I understand what you're trying to do, you might say this something like: I froze, as in that instant a series of images flashed through my mind: the time I cut my finger while opening a can of peaches, the time I watched that scary movie at Lorianne's house, the time I fell off my bike.
- If I understand what you're trying to do, you might say this something like: I froze, as in that instant a series of images flashed through my mind: the time I cut my finger while opening a can of peaches, the time I watched that scary movie at Lorianne's house, the time I fell off my bike.
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If I understand what you're trying to do, you might say this something like:
I froze, as in that instant a series of images flashed through my mind: the time I cut my finger while opening a can of peaches, the time I watched that scary movie at Lorianne's house, the time I fell off my bike.
I froze, as in that instant a series of images flashed through my mind: the time I cut my finger while opening a can of peaches, the time I watched that scary movie at Lorianne's house, the time I fell off my bike.
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Thank you for your response! Is there another way I could reword this?
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