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Anonymous Posted 13 years ago
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Does this sentence sound good and completely correct?
By destroying Gunthar’s intelligence network, Kitiara ensured the knowledge that she possessed a flying citadel would remain a secret for as long as possible.
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Anonymous By destroying Gunthar’s intelligence network, Kitiara ensured the knowledge that she possessed a flying citadel would remain a secret for as long as possible. It's grammatically correct, but it has a little flaw, namely, that "the knowledge that she possessed" sounds like the subject of a clause, and we expect a verb to follow. We think "She possessed knowledge", but you want us to think "She possessed a flying citadel", so "a flying citadel" seems out of place until we get to the end of the sentence.
- Anonymous By destroying Gunthar’s intelligence network, Kitiara ensured the knowledge that she possessed a flying citadel would remain a secret for as long as possible.
- It's grammatically correct, but it has a little flaw, namely, that "the knowledge that she possessed" sounds like the subject of a clause, and we expect a verb to follow.
- We think "She possessed knowledge", but you want us to think "She possessed a flying citadel", so "a flying citadel" seems out of place until we get to the end of the sentence.
- Then we have to go back and read it again to be sure we understood what was meant.
- In your place I would change the wording to avoid that little flaw.
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Anonymous By destroying Gunthar’s intelligence network, Kitiara ensured the knowledge that she possessed a flying citadel would remain a secret for as long as possible.It's grammatically correct, but it has a little flaw, namely, that "the knowledge that she possessed" sounds like the subject of a clause, and we expect a verb to follow. We think "She possess
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