Doe's this sentence make sense?
I'm writing a poem for my English project and I'm not sure if this makes sense:
Once upon a time, I met a furry bunny
He had white fur and also very funny.
He welcomed me to his den, a door bell ringed just then.
It was his mail, inside were pens ten.
I'm trying to rhyme then with ten but I'm not sure if " inside were pens ten" makes sense. The poem is a free verse and I'm trying to add personification, please help me!
Top answer
It's not free verse. It rhymes. The last sentence is not correct, and it doesn't sound good.
- It's not free verse.
- It rhymes.
- The last sentence is not correct, and it doesn't sound good.
- " He had white fur and was also very funny.
- " I'd separate these two sentences.
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It's not free verse. It rhymes.
The last sentence is not correct, and it doesn't sound good.
"He had white fur and also very funny." He had white fur and was also very funny.
"He welcomed me to his den, a door bell ringed just then." I'd separate these two sentences.
The bell rang.
0Sabrina HuangI'm trying to rhyme then with ten but I'm not sure if " inside were pens ten" makes sense.
No, you can't do that.
If you're willing to make some changes and give up your rhyme with 'ten', you can make another version with a rhyme with 'bunny'.
Once upon a time, I met a little bunny
Who was really very furry and really
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