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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
Grammar

Does this sentence make sense?

Sandy's mother looked at the half-filled glass of milk on the table before glaring at Sandy, particularly the stain running down her shirt, knowing immediately that she had spilled her drink.

Was everything grammatically correct? do I need to repeat glaring again after particularly?

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I think you need to repeat 'at'. I'd leave out 'particularly'; the comma already does that job in a way. glaring at Sandy, at the stain running down her shirt, knowing ...

— Ferdis

  • I think you need to repeat 'at'.
  • I'd leave out 'particularly'; the comma already does that job in a way.
  • glaring at Sandy, at the stain running down her shirt, knowing ...
  • or, alternatively ...
  • glaring at Sandy, at the stain running down her shirt in particular, knowing ...
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I think you need to repeat 'at'.

I'd leave out 'particularly'; the comma already does that job in a way.

... glaring at Sandy, at the stain running down her shirt, knowing ...

or, alternatively

... glaring at Sandy, at the stain running down her shirt in particular, knowing ...
... glaring at Sandy, particularly at the stain running down her shirt, knowing
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I would agree that the clause beginning with "particularly" seems to dangle, in the original, and needs to be attached to a main verb.

Another variant:

1. Sandy's mother looked at the half-filled glass of milk on the table before glaring at Sandy, and in particular at the stain running down her shirt, knowing immediately that she had spilled her drink.

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