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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
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Does this sentence end abruptly?
Does this sentence end abruptly? I am not sure if this is awkward or fine. I am leaning on it being okay.
It is not only for transportation and GIS, but a high interest in statistics and transit data sets (surveys too) that I hope to hear from you.
Should I edit it to be like:
It is not only for transportation and GIS, but a high interest in statistics and transit data sets (surveys too) that attract me to the position. I hope to hear from you.
Thanks !
It is not only for transportation and GIS, but a high interest in statistics and transit data sets (surveys too) that I hope to hear from you.
Should I edit it to be like:
It is not only for transportation and GIS, but a high interest in statistics and transit data sets (surveys too) that attract me to the position. I hope to hear from you.
Thanks !
Top answer
Lean the other way. I think this means that you're attracted to the job because of your interest in the statistical study of transportation and GIS. You are the critical interest here (you want a job, the prospective employer you to fill a job), but you don't appear until four words before the end of the sentence.
- Lean the other way.
- I think this means that you're attracted to the job because of your interest in the statistical study of transportation and GIS.
- You are the critical interest here (you want a job, the prospective employer you to fill a job), but you don't appear until four words before the end of the sentence.
- Surveys are in there "too," but I have no idea why.
- Your salutation ("I hope to hear from you") definitely has to be its own sentence.
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Lean the other way.
I think this means that you're attracted to the job because of your interest in the statistical study of transportation and GIS. You are the critical interest here (you want a job, the prospective employer you to fill a job), but you don't appear until four words before the end of the sentence.
Surveys are in there "too," but I have no idea why. Your salut
I think this means that you're attracted to the job because of your interest in the statistical study of transportation and GIS. You are the critical interest here (you want a job, the prospective employer you to fill a job), but you don't appear until four words before the end of the sentence.
Surveys are in there "too," but I have no idea why. Your salut
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Yeah, I thought the second one is better too after reading with a fresh mind. Thank you so much. I am going to go with the second sentence as is, so if you think that should be changed, let me know.
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You needn't substitute my judgment for your own, but in my time I've looked over hundreds of job inquiry and cover letters. It's true that some were written with quill pen and ink, but still. I think you need a straightforward sentence that says "I am interested in your job because."
It's up to you.
It's up to you.
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Awesome. I read your first response rather quick and was not sure on what you mean. I understand now. I will take a look. Thank you.
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